Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Exercise addiction

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Hey! I found an article on the symptoms, diagnosis, epidemiology, and etiology of exercise addiction which might be useful. https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/full/10.3109/10826084.2011.639120?casa_token=Fa1yk47nMFEAAAAA%3Ay7CLrqsgQwWSNtPbQNNUXntULntaFnz_qZZWVn7JsO6sVv3iPrMwyYGeZSIADpKe8a4m9egFRMnrKw

It also may be helpful to look at the reward pathway to explain how an addiction is created. I've found a really great video that explains the reward pathway which you could include as an external link. https://www.khanacademy.org/science/in-in-class-12-biology-india/xc09ed98f7a9e671b:in-in-human-health-and-disease/xc09ed98f7a9e671b:in-in-addiction-and-dependence/v/reward-pathway-in-the-brain#:~:text=The%20reward%20pathway%20of%20the,we%20will%20repeat%20the%20behavior. --Taylor Mamukic (discuss • contribs) 01:50, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Hey there ! Over exercising is an interesting topic when discussing why some may be motivated to engage in it. I just thought that it may be interesting to discuss how exercise addiction is prevalent among those with eating disorders! Here is an article that may help guide this discussion if you chose to discuss it: https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1002/erv.1122?casa_token=EeZa_65BCqQAAAAA%3AUzj3DJIjWv5P2eB2faG0E4QAOe4MBppDDShHYWO96Z1l0tj-1EcQQJlmQpNks_HAfJWMFcVLCJrZP2Ac it is from Meyer et al., (2011) and is an interesting read on the topic :) --U3190016 (discuss • contribs) 03:47, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I found that there's a really interesting topic you've had but you might include some quizzes if you like just for a break and fun activity for the readers to read. Good luck.

Comments

Hi, Hoping this helps with the referencing component of your topic development. A good breakdown of what exercise addiction is and some of its effects.

Freimuth, M., Moniz, S., & Kim, S. R. (2011). Clarifying Exercise Addiction: Differential Diagnosis, Co-occurring Disorders, and Phases of Addiction. International Journal of Environmental Research and Public Health, 8(10), 4069–4081. https://doi.org/10.3390/ijerph8104069 --U3174214 (discuss • contribs) 12:27, 30 August 2020 (UTC) ‌

Animal models

Could be good to see if there are any animal models (e.g. studies looking at a rat running a wheel and examining any withdrawal symptoms)and how that applies to humans --Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 04:30, 2 September 2020 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:02, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Just some ideas

Hi,
Exercise addiction is a really interesting topic. Eating disorders can be a cause of this addiction. I found this really interesting article you might like; https://link.springer.com/chapter/10.1007/978-3-642-45378-6_7 Also maybe look at the neurobiological causes of addiction; https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1300/J160v01n03_02?casa_token=fgMv8mF2J4kAAAAA:2xZZWb961ifLo3udqImm1-SJ-oRQuieAkei-OW7OpXXndhpLDm50j63zU9xs8oRdePpWWD_b1dY Good luck!
--U3201178 (discuss • contribs) 07:55, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Referencing

Hey, just wanted to let you know that for APA they use a hanging indent and it can be a bit confusing on wikiversity. If you go to the template used you can copy it and quickly insert it at the begining of your list and at the end this will make it APA style. --U3114726 (discuss • contribs) 06:13, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Subheadings

Hello, your page is amazing. There is a lot of information on this page however I suggest putting them into subheadings so it is easier to read.

Social contribution

Hi there, your chapter looks great! one thing i did notice was that it seemed that the three questions from the subheading were not equally addressed, the management of exercise addiction is not as in depth as the other sections, while the measurement section is quite large and could perhaps be condensed to make more room for further investigation of management of exercise addiction. There were also a few in text citations that caught my eye that were missing the year. Cheers :) U3145017 (discuss • contribs) 14:37, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

Conclusion

Hello! Great topic and very interesting. I hope you don't mind I tidied up your conclusion with a few grammatical changes. In terms of measures, its always good to look at the DSM 5 for behaviour and personality diagnosis, I believe it's under "behaviour addiction". Great read, thank you. Cat

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. Theory is quite well covered (e.g., the EA phenomenon is well described). There is some reasonably good understanding about the causes. Some research is discussed, but not in a lot of detail. Instead there is overly long description of measured tools which could be abbreviated and summarised (e.g., in a table). Some basic examples are provided. The quality of written expression is OK, but more proofreading could improve the grammar and reduce the typographical errors. A case study in the Overview could help to engage reader interest. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter (e.g., move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section). For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Clarify earlier on - is exercise addiction a colloquial term or a clinically-recognised disorder? Consider, explain, clarify. Maybe consider links with self-tracking. The EA phenomenon is well described. Some relevant theories are described, including a neuroscience perspective. Perhaps elaborate further on cognitive, behavioural, evolutionary, and/or cultural perspectives. Research Relevant research is reasonably well mentioned throughout, but could be improved by providing a more indepth review. The content about measurement tools was interesting but the could be improved by abbreviated it to allow for a more indepth review of research. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Learning features Move Wikipedia links from external links to the see also section. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include full journal title. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~4 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:18, 11 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check/fix capitalisation. Audio recording quality was good. Visual display quality was very good. Image copyright status is provided, but no links to sources are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:18, 23 November 2020 (UTC)