It might be interesting to explore exercise addiction as a confounding factor in peoples reason to engage in endurance sports. As endurance sports are not available to beginners due to their physical demands. It is self-evident that the participants would all have a history of consistent exercise. The 2019 literature review I included below supported this theory finding that exercise addiction is more prevalent among regular exercises than the public. It was also highest in the most strenuous sports, highlighting endurance sports specifically as having the highest rates of exercise addiction.
Under your 'Research and Theories' heading, It might be useful to refer to self-determination related papers by Ryan and Deci, as they are well established and likely a foundational part of the literature.
Reference (Not APA): Di Lodovico, L., Poulnais, S., & Gorwood, P. (2019). Which sports are more at risk of physical exercise addiction: a systematic review. Addictive behaviors, 93, 257-262.
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A really interesting topic! Would love to see a direct comparison between motivation to participate in sport and motivation to engage in endurance sport. This could also be done through a graph to add engage to reading audience. --U3174214 (discuss • contribs) 12:24, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
a description of the problem and what will be covered
an example or case study
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Expand theory and research.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
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The Overview provides an insufficient introduction to the topic (the sub-title question) and chapter focus.
Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of the best-available psychological research about this topic.
Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard.
Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
The sub-headings in bold should be formatted as wiki headings so that they appear in the table of contents.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section.
Basic use of image(s).
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Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1].
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An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. But the general theory lacks sufficient application to the endurance sport context. There is no mention of any relevant research.
Comments about the book chapter also larger apply to this section.
The presentation is well structured.
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good/a bit quiet - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
Visual display quality was good.
Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
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