Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Disgust and disease avoidance motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:17, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Title and sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings 3-level heading structure - consider simplifying to 2-levels There is too much emphasis on background content that is not directly related to the topic. There is not enough emphasis directly on the topic which is: "What role does disgust play in disease avoidance motivation?" See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Limited development Image An image (figure) is presented. The image is not very relevant to the chapter. Caption does not use APA style (replace colon with full-stop). could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. References Included but not cited. For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 1) Include source in brackets after link External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:17, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. The Overview is insufficiently developed - it lacks sufficient focus on the topic which is not disgust per se, but the role disgust plays in disease avoidance. There is already a general chapter about disgust, so this emotion can be summarised with a link to this pre-existing chapter, allowing the current chapter to focus on its target topic. In contrast, the Conclusion is excellent. The chapter starts to address the target topic with the section titled: "Disgust as a Disease-Avoidance Mechanism". Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Check out Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Disgust. Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Limited use of image(s). The one image was labelled Figure 3. Perhaps other images were deleted due to lack of sufficient copyright information? No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Only include author surname and year, not first name or initials. Don't provide article titles in the main body, only in references. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:57, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic because there is too much emphasis on disgust as a general emotion and too little on its application to disease avoidance. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes little to no use of research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The video title should be the full chapter title and sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. This presentation may have violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:40, 22 November 2020 (UTC)