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Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
The main area for potential improvement is in proofreading and grammar. But this is relatively minor compared to the excellent description of theory and related research.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Highlighting major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is very good, but some grammar tweaks and better proofreading would be ideal.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
Use bullet-points (e.g., for the external links section) and numbered lists (in main body), per Tutorial 1.
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
Good use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s).
Basic use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
No use of quiz(zes).
Grammar
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').
Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter.
Spelling
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
APA style
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
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