Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Cortisol and motivation

Visual aid addition

Hi there, you look like you are still in the process of developing your book chapter. To improve visual aids I would recommend adding in a picture of Cortisol, I found one on Wikicommons that may be of use to you Cortisol. Best of luck with submission!

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:02, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Very good Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created Minimal About me Add heading Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio Add link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Use a numbered list. Add a brief summary of each contribution. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure What theory/theories will be covered? Practical applications/examples are promising See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Consider adding: an image. a case study. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts (e.g., cortisol) and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for most sections. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. does not use APA style (check capitalisation). Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider aligning image on right to allow text to flow/wrap on left. References Very good. Excellent. For full APA style, use: correct capitalisation Resources Very good Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:02, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Article suggestion

Found this article about how cortisol is related to to alcoholic motivation http://web.b.ebscohost.com/ehost/detail/detail?vid=0&sid=98285201-768d-4207-b8a7-15461b7517b8%40sessionmgr101&bdata=#AN=138052556&db=asn --Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 00:44, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Promising use of embedded in-text links to Wikipedia articles. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Abbreviations Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:06, 4 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Add and narrate an initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation is well structured. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic. The presentation makes excellent use of theory. The presentation makes very good use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation and articulation enhances listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is very well produced. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are not used on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Provide a statement about image sources and their copyright status A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:14, 24 November 2020 (UTC)