Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Conscientiousness and motivation

Comments on Overview

I was reading through your overview which was very intriguing and straight to the point. Just something that I noticed was the first sentence; "This chapter aims to inform individuals about conscientiousness and motivation. This chapter will give an overview about conscientiousness". The only thing I would change is to compress these two sentences into one long sentence. I would word it something like this; "This chapter will give you an overview about conscientiousness while also aiming to inform you about how conscientiousness compensates motivation. Apart from that everything else looks good. --U3190523 (discuss • contribs) 10:03, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. For Wikiversity edits to existing pages, add direct links like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overview - Consider adding: an image Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about conscientiousness and motivation as separate constructions). Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. In this sense, the most important section is "The relationship between conscientiousness and motivation", so aim to expand it. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Conclusion (the most important section): what might the take-home, practical messages be? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good list For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:50, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Quiz

Hi, this chapter looks great so far! However, I noted that your quiz has only two questions. I would suggest adding more questions and moving it to the end of your chapter, or adding another short quiz at the end, to continually keep people engaged. U3189449 (discuss • contribs) 07:09, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Revision notes

Hi User:U3187486, some great content in your chapter. Be mindful about using consistent spacing after full stops (i.e. single or double space). APA 7 uses one space after a period. Also, consider whether “the” is needed in front of self-determination theory and goal setting theory in your theoretical frameworks section. Hope this helps. Here’s a link to review the changes I made :) --U3186080 (discuss • contribs) 15:15, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Case study

Here is a link to an interesting case study that is relevant to your topic, it may be useful! https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/9141284/ U3176522 (discuss • contribs) 01:46, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because there is too much general theoretical material and too little specifically focusing on the topic (i.e., relation between conscientiousness and motivation). For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Consider using more case studies to illustrate key theoretical principles in action. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Layout The chapter is reasonably well structured, but effectively only begins addressing the topic in "The relationship between conscientiousness and motivation" section. Learning features Use bullet-points (e.g., for the see also section), per Tutorial 1. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes), but the questions should focus more directly on the topic (i.e,. the relation between C and M). No use of case studies or examples. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation. Retrieved from is not used for APA style 7th ed. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~9 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:50, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section, particularly around the emphasis/focus. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be improved by making the structure/purpose more clear. The presentation makes reasonable use of relevant theory - but probably could be stronger by focusing more directly on the role that conscientiousness plays in motivation (rather than emphasising general motivational theories). The presentation makes some use of research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video is produced using simple tools. Hide the audio icon. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:53, 22 November 2020 (UTC)