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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Overly complicated 3-level structure - consider simplifying to a 2-level structure.
Maybe rethink the wording for the top level of heading - it should be possible to just read these headings and get a reasonably good idea about what is in the chapter - the headings could be more informative.
Perhaps consider - what are the similarities and differences between compersion and jealousy/envy?
Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections.
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
a description of the problem and what will be covered
an image
an example or case study
Use peer-reviewed sources. Other material could be in external links.
Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about emotion). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Interesting question about whether compersion can be learned - will draw on theory and research.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
@U3202026: Great to see this resource developing. Some suggestions:
The main feedback is to keep developing the sections which directly address the sub-title question and eep other sections minimal or even remove if they are not directly addressing the question.
I copyedited the Overview - might give some ideas for tweaks elsewhere (e.g., use active rather than passive expression)
Consider moving the first case study to the beginning of its section. Consider breaking the case study into two parts - e.g., perhaps initially a jealous scenario that later develops to become less jealous, with greater compersion
The theoretical background about emotion is really only useful to the extent that it is subsequently applied to discussion about compersion - e.g,. is compersion natural or learned? is it biological or cognitive? etc.
If there is a lack of info about developing compersion (likely), then provide critical comment about what is not known - what would be interested to know, that perhaps we know about other emotions, but don't yet know about compersion etc.
APA style for citations - use "and" in main text and "&" in parentheses
Refer to each figure at least once in the main text
Quiz questions - consider splitting up so that each question appears at the end of the corresponding section
Provide in-text wiki links to related book chapters e.g., for jealousy, polyamory etc. Those links are in see also, which is great, but where relevant also include as in-text links.
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Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects".
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
APA style
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
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The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
The presentation makes effective, basic use of animated slides.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
