Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Child killer motivation

Case Study

It may be beneficial if you included a case study, there are many good cases. One very famous case was Venable and Thompson. --U3177510 (discuss • contribs) 12:40, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Dark Triad

Hi I would also look at the dark triad and other ways of looking at anti social personality disorder. --U3185008 (discuss • contribs) 12:08, 30 August 2020 (UTC)u3185008

Comments

Hello! I found this Tedtalk that could be an interesting external link, or possibly even a source of information that can be researched further for your book chapter! I hope this helps: https://www.ted.com/talks/jim_fallon_exploring_the_mind_of_a_killer#t-368799 --U3160224 (discuss • contribs) 05:36, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I thought this study was an interesting aspect on the ethical implications is research surrounding the disclosure of a child's death, hope it can add something to your chapter. https://www.researchgate.net/publication/50303417_Disclosure_of_child_murder_A_case_study_of_ethical_dilemmas_in_research --U3160493 (discuss • contribs) 08:08, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Hi i found this research article on the prevention of these crimes. Check it out! https://doi-org.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/10.1037/cpp0000064 --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi I think you would enjoy reading the Wiley International Handbook of Correctional Psychology (Devon et., al 2019). There are some really good chapters. --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Dark Triad and Juvenile Crime

Hey! I found this article on the dark triad and crime, relating to juveniles and psychopathy that you might find interesting. https://journals-sagepub-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/full/10.1177/1541204016667995 --U3193728 (discuss • contribs) 11:50, 24 August 2021 (UTC)

Social Learning Theory

Hey, Highly recommend looking into Bandura's modelling behaviour. Mary Bell is a child serial killer with evidence to support her behaviour could have been modelled after her mother. Mary is now a grandmother and has been completely rehabilitated for many years. --Ciara Holmes (discuss • contribs) 00:50, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

Headings/Page set out

This topic looks really interesting, and I think you will be able to go really deep into the motivation of child homicide. May I suggest making your heading clear, and removing any brackets to clarify what you mean by your heading. You will be able to explain in the paragraphs --U3190522 (discuss • contribs) 10:36, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Omitting 'what is motivation' section

Hi. I noticed you made motivation a section of its own when just above it you have reserved a place to explain child killer motivation. I think it would be better if you explain both in the same section. I do not think it is necessary to diffentiate them. --Fiddausi Husseini (discuss • contribs) 10:21, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Headings

Hi, your page looks great but it would be better if the headings were clearer.

Social contribution

i found this article that seemed like an interesting insight to this topic, they claim to be using a unique qualitative methodology which could be an interesting angle. Jung, K., Kim, H., Lee, E., Choi, I., Lim, H., Lee, B., ... & Hong, H. G. (2020). Cluster analysis of child homicide in South Korea. Child Abuse & Neglect, 101, 104322. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.chiabu.2019.104322

cheers :) U3145017 (discuss • contribs) 14:24, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

James Bulger Case

Hi! This topic is really interesting and it may be helpful to use case studies throughout. One case that is particularly shocking / interesting that I thought may be good to share with you is the case of James Bulger (aged 3) who was abducted and murdered by two ten year olds. The events that lead to his death are horrific and it is shocking to know children are capable in planning such acts. This happened in 1993, and at the time was the youngest ever murder conviction. There are plenty of documentaries on this case but there is also a wikipedia page which may be of use to add to your "see also" list of your book chapter.

Murder of James Bulger

--U3180567 (discuss • contribs) 05:49, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

The Trials of Gabriel Fernandez

Hey there is this documentary on netflix about a kid abused by his parents which led him to his death if you wanted to mention this case? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Murder_of_Gabriel_Fernandez (discuss • contribs) 14:24, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:26, 29 November 2020 (UTC)

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