Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Basic psychological need theory

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Removal of links that do not work[edit source]

Hi there, unfortunately the links you have included throughout the text do not go anywhere. I would recommend ammending or removing the links. Hope this is useful.

Image suggestion[edit source]

I am doing the 'autonomy support and motivation' chapter and I have included an image that might be relevant to your chapter. It shows the types of motivation on a continuum of autonomy, and seems to have been added to the commons by another student. The file name is: File:Taxonomy motivation.png

Hope this helps!

--U3190052 (discusscontribs) 05:04, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

Further image/case study suggestion[edit source]

Your chapter on basic psychological need theory is very interesting, and well thought out. However, to make it possibly a little bit more captivating, I suggest adding more relevant images, or case study bubbles to highlight important notes in your research. Hope this helps --U3190522 (discusscontribs) 07:40, 18 October 2020 (UTC)U3190522

Suggesting the use of an overview[edit source]

For this part below you should put into a section called overview before basic psychological theory as this will give more flow. Basic psychological need theory explain the psychological need of people.

In self-determination theory, basic psychological needs serve as the basis for personality growth and integration, well-being, and positive social development. The theory identifies three specific needs, which are considered universal and applicable throughout the lifespan.

Maslow need theory also mentions the psychological need. In Maslow theory,

Consistency theory --Laurenpeel (discusscontribs) 11:24, 26 August 2020 (UTC)laurenpeel

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:06, 16 September 2020 (UTC)

Suggestion for quizzes[edit source]

Hey ! i found these helpful flashcards that might be useful for your quizzes. I attempted them straight after reading your page and felt your page was very informative, well done ! U3177123 (discusscontribs) 21:18, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for this. I'm not too sure how they link into my page though- perhaps you've linked into the wrong page? All the best, Anubhandary (discusscontribs)

Hi, I'm not sure if this is meant for my page either... These quizzes don't seem to relate to my content. Thanks anyway! TaraMaland

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  3. Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  4. Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history
  5. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Not created
  2. Created, minimal
  3. Add description about self
  4. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  5. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Under-developed, 2-level heading structure
  2. This plan needs some work - suggest starting with a close reading of Chapter 6 in Reeve (2018) and that should help to conceptualise a more focused plan for this chapter.
  3. BNPT (basic psychological needs theory) is one of the sub-theories of self determination theory - make this more clear and use it as a framework
  4. Needs greater emphasis on autonomy, competence, and relatedness and less emphasis or removal of other content
  5. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  6. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. This will be an overview/gateway chapter about BNPT. Make sure to embed and link to more specific chapters about each of autonomy, competence, relatedness, intrinsic motivation, and extrinsic motivation.
  2. Overview and Conclusion are the most important sections but haven't been planned yet.
  3. Basic development of key points, but lacks appropriate focus - address the sub-title question.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is not presented.

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. formatting
    2. capitalisation
    3. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Very good
    2. Be selective, but especially identify more links to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. See examples for how to format
    2. Include title of target page as linked text and source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:06, 16 September 2020 (UTC)

Feedback[edit source]

@U3182677: I've had a quick look through the draft. Some suggestions:

  1. Word count is ~4800, so will need to be reduced. The most obvious aspect to reduce is the general background about SDT since this is covered by other chapters and Wikipedia pages which can be linked to. In addition, the experiment section can be removed since it is about intrinsic/extrinsic motivation and rewards rather than BPNT. In effect, in terms of addressing the topic, the chapter doesn't really start until the "Basic criteria for the Basic Psychological Needs Theory (BPNT)" section. Basically, there is much general background theory and little about BPNT.
  2. Overview - consider adding focus questions.
  3. Use wiki links for the first mention of key words/concepts to other related book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages.
  4. Use Australian spelling (e.g., recognizes -> recognises).
  5. In addition to need satisfaction perhaps also consider need frustration.
  6. Citations
    1. use ampersand rather than "and" when citations are within parentheses
    2. extra comma needed e.g., (Li, Wang & Kee, 2013) -> (Li, Wang, & Kee, 2013)
  7. A Conclusion section is missing. What are the practical, take-home messages that can help to improve everyday life?
  8. Avoid having sections with only one subsection.
  9. See also and external links need tidying up - remove the template links and replace with more relevant links.
  10. References
    1. Use APA style 7th edition style e.g.,
      1. remove "Retrieved from" (no longer part of APA 7th ed.)
      2. Include full URL for dois
      3. Check and correct capitalisation and italicisation
  11. This may be of interest: Reeve, J., & Lee, W. (2019). A neuroscientific perspective on basic psychological needs. Journal of Personality, 87(1), 102-114.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Also, remember to include and cite some APA style captioned images. These could be used to provide illustrative examples. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:45, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

@U3182677: Some additional feedback:

  1. The title and sub-title appear to have been removed
  2. Theory - since BPNT is a sub-theory of SDT (this could be made more clear), it isn't really necessary to present Maslow's hierarchy of needs or consistency theory, especially if they are not mentioned or used subsequently in the chapter. Instead, consider providing a more indepth overview of BPNT in the context of SDT.
  3. A lot of links to non-existing Wikiversity pages have been added. Perhaps these are intended to be Wikipedia links. See Tutorial 2 for how to add links to Wikipedia pages. Also in this tutorial, check out how to use bullet-points (e.g., for the key points in the Overview).
  4. External links - remove the generic links from the template material
  5. Remove the rogue wiki reference showing at the very end
  6. Frustration is now well embedded into the chapter. However, the frustration section towards the end seems a little out of place. Is it needed? Could it be integrated earlier? The dual-process model hasn't been mentioned to that point, so it seems odd to bring it up so late in the chapter. The content is also quite dense. Consider providing a simple, practical example, say of need satisfaction vs. need frustration.
  7. References - APA 7th ed. style - include issue number and dois, check and correct capitalisation etc.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:34, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does a good job of overviewing psychological theory about needs.
  2. There is a lack of review of research.
  3. There is a lack of examples/applications to real-world problems/scenarios or how to apply this information in personal self-help sense - what are the practical, take-home messages?
  4. In the Overview, consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. A useful and interesting range of relevant theory is well covered and explained.
  2. There is a distinct lack of appropriate citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  3. It would be helpful to point out that BPNT is one of five sub-theories of SDT.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
  2. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags) Frowny.svg.
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is OK. The main area for improvement is to make the text more accessible to an unfamiliar audience - the chapter makes for quite dense and abstract reading. More examples would help. Case studies could really help.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. It is most often not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  1. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  2. Learning features
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. But once the link has been used, don't keep using the link for every mention of the word.
    1. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    2. Basic use of image(s). Consider making the images larger so that they are easier to read.
    3. No use of table(s).
    4. Minimal use of feature box(es).
    5. No use of quiz(zes).
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
    3. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:).
    4. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
      3. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are in good, but not quite full APA style. For example:
      1. Include hyperlinked dois which display for full URL.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section.
  2. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes good use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes no use of research.
  6. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  7. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation consists mainly of narrated text on the screen, with a couple of images.
  2. Consider selecting less content (i.e., identify the most important points), slowing down, and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read, with less text on each slide.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was poor at the very beginning but them improved to be of a good standard.
  3. Visual display quality was OK. One of the images was very difficult to read.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
  5. This presentation may probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:48, 21 November 2020 (UTC)