Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Achievement goal theory

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:00, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created Used effectively About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Use a numbered list. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Write using 3rd person perspective. Overview: focus questions - use bullet-points or numbered list Basic development of key points for some sections; other sections empty Very promising use of case studies , with relevant citations. Lack of theory and research. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author initials). Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style, use: correct italicisation the new recommended format for dois Resources Very good Include info about source in brackets

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:00, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Reference List

Your chapter looks great! Your use of visuals makes the chapter really stand out, the focus on dance is a really interesting way to focus in on this psych theory. The only thing that caught my eye was the reference list make sure you italicize title of the journal and volume number, use sentence casing for title of article and title casing for journal title. the guide i was using said there is a new format for DOI's too, and that the use of et al. was appropriate for authors of three or more for in text citation. Here's the link :) https://libguides.jcu.edu.au/apa/reference-list

U3145017 (discuss • contribs) 13:43, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Key strengths of this chapter are its understanding and explanation of theory and use of visual diagrams. Key areas for improvement could be the review of research and the quality of written expression. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are very well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is reasonably well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression A strength of the written expression is the independent voice - the chapter is clearly based on a closer reading of relevant academic literature. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[1]. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As discussed", "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Fabulous development of diagrams to communicate conceptual ideas - congratulations . Note that more meta-data is needed for: File:David-hofmann-e_rhazQLaSs-unsplash.jpg; seems to be falsely claimed as your own work and no source URL is provided. File:20150956099d2025502.jpg; seems to be falsely claimed as your own work and no source URL is provided. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Excellent use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Very promising use of quiz(zes) - love the case studies. However, the answers to Q1 and Q2 seemed to be incorrect? (have changed them). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Often what could help is to change a comma into a full-stop (i.e., split a sentence into two sentences). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. APA style In general, do not capitalize the names of diseases, disorders, therapies, treatments, theories, concepts, hypotheses, principles, models, and statistical procedures. Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:37, 4 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes good use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent intonation and articulation enhances listener interest and engagement. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is very well produced. The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided, but it is broken. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:28, 24 November 2020 (UTC)