Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Workplace stress and motivation

Comment

Perhaps consider different types of workplaces for stress. For example, blue collar vs white collar workers to evaluate a difference between the two. --BMPENFOLD (discuss • contribs) 03:04, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:44, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Key points are reasonably well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Remove or adapt generic template content. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:44, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, creditable chapter with reasonably good emphasis on theory and research in relation to an applied problem. The chapter could be improved by more disciplined in focusing on the sub-title question and leaving aside material that is not directly relevant. I've moved the focus questions into the Overview, to help give the reader an Overview about what the chapter will address. The chapter could be improved by focusing more directly on the topic (the sub-title). For example, there is no need to cover the relationship between workplace stress and disease because the chapter topic is about the relationship between workplace stress and motivation. The most relevant section is "Implications of stress on motivation", however this section is relatively short and general, without much theory or research. The Conclusion could be improved by providing less of a summary and placing more emphasis on the take-away messages in response to each of the focus questions. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory but it needs to be more specifically focused around the chapter topic (workplace stress and motivation). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Some paragraphs are overly long (e.g,. the last paragraph). Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Basic use of interwiki links; more would be better, including embedded links to related book chapters. Good use of images. Good use of tables, although the content doesn't seem to be directly related to the chapter topic. Basic use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, social contributions with some direct and some indirect links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:50, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an reasonably good presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content The presentation is well structured. Reasonably well selected content - not too much or too little. Perhaps the presentation could be strengthened by providing some more detail about research findings (e.g., is there perhaps a single, key meta-analysis that has quantified the relationship of interest?). Add citations for key points to match the references on the final slide. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding some practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes effective use of text based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The presentation makes very good use of some clear conceptual diagrams. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good/a bit quiet - review microphone set-up. Video recording quality was excellent. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:55, 18 November 2019 (UTC)