Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Volunteer tourism motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:08, 19 August 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Formatting and content fixed User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Avoid too much generic background info. Summarise and provide links to Wikipedia articles and other book chapters for more info. Remove or adapt generic template content. Basic, uneven development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Maybe consider Leonard, R., & Onyx, J. (2009). Volunteer tourism: The interests and motivations of grey nomads. Annals of Leisure Research, 12(3-4), 315-332. Direct quotes need page numbers; even better, express in your own words. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. References OK. For full APA style: Alphabetical order Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Messy - edited to tidy up

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:23, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. Include more examples or a case study. Solid Overview. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. Callan and Thomas (2005) three levels - but only two are described? Did you consult Maslow (1943)? If not, this should be a secondary citation. Maslow's hierarchy of needs is probably overused (too much general background). Instead, summarise and link to further general information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Perhaps also consider Clary and Snydner's functional model of volunteering motivations. Perhaps also consider the exploitative/colonial potential of VT. Research Some relevant research is reviewed, but the chapter lacks a comprehensive synthesis of research about VT motivations. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is poorly written. The quality of written expression is below professional standard. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Remove citations from headings. Learning features Almost no use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very basic use of images. No use of tables. Very basic use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove double-spaces Sentences should start with capital letters. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. A full stop is needed after "et al". A comma is needed for citations like (Maslow 1943) i.e., (Maslow, 1943) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:29, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good, basic presentation. Structure and content Reasonably well selected content, although probably could be improved by slowing down and presenting less. There is a "relentless" with packing. There is little pause or break-up e.g., with examples. Sounds like the narrator is just reading a long script rather than creating an engaging presentation. not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). The presentation is poorly structured. In particular, it lacks a Title, Overview, and Conclusion. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. Communication The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality Check and correct grammar (e.g., ones -> one's). Communicate the chapter title in the file name. Use the chapter title and correct sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was good but probably recorded with an on board microphone rather than a plug in microphone because keyboard clicks can be heard. Visual presentation and recording quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is/not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:59, 17 November 2019 (UTC)