Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Vicarious post-traumatic growth

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:12, 30 August 2019 (UTC)

I also suggest using somewhat shorter headings (e.g, remove citations from headings). Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:12, 30 August 2019 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Good

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Remove citations
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  5. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed, but incomplete for the latter sections.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
  5. I suggest using "post-traumatic" as that is in the chapter title, to be consistent

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Expand caption
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:14, 27 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon.
  2. Overview - There are some questions in the paragraph and some in bullet-point form. Consider consolidating and providing a less question-based intro, followed by focus questions.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Integration between theories is excellent. Balanced, critical consideration evident.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is very well written.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. See also - add links to related book chapters
    2. Excellent use of interwiki links
    3. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    4. Good use of images.
    5. Very good use of tables.
    6. Excellent use of feature boxes.
    7. Excellent use of quizzes.
    8. Good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations use correct APA style.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~8 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:19, 8 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of animated slide tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate a Title slide which contains the title and sub-title, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  6. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Generally well paced, although perhaps leave longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider using greater upwards intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  3. Video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Image source is provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:35, 17 November 2019 (UTC)