Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Union membership motivation

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Perhaps consider moving the case study to its own section for ease of reading and better flow. Aalto Bowers (discuss • contribs) 01:41, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Missing - have added User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, paying particular attention to theory and research. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Write for an international audience, although a local case study could be used. Basic development of key points for most section. Lack of citation of relevant theory and research. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Maybe of interest: Granik, S. (2005). Membership benefits, membership action: why incentives for activism are what members want. Journal of Nonprofit & Public Sector Marketing, 14(1-2), 65-89. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption is unintelligible and not in APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default. References Use APA style. Resources See also None External links See reformatting

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:23, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

See also

@Phil B. Prout: The current See also links should be moved to external links. See also is for interwiki links to related Wikiversity book chapters and Wikipedia articles. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:39, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:30, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising but insufficient chapter. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Some general motivation theory is usefully applied to understanding union membership, but there is a lack of use of more specific literature on the topic. Did you consult Festinger (1957)? If not, this should be a secondary citation. Research Overall, this chapter makes basic use of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview, including the case study. The Overview could be improved by adding focus questions. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Learning features Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Most of the "See also" links need to be moved to "External links". And they need to be culled down to those that are most relevant to the topic. Then in "See also", provide links to the Wikipedia articles and/or other book chapters about these general topics. Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic/minimal use of images. Basic/minimal use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Do not include author initials. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. See new doi format. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:30, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. This presentation uses simple tools. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Structure and content Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Opening example helps to engage the viewer. However, note that a lot of workers internationally do not get paid well; the presentation should address an international audience. Add a conclusion: What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation uses text and image based slides with narrated audio and animations. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very quiet - I needed to listen on max. volume to just barely hear. Review microphone set up. Visual display quality was excellent good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A general link to the Motivation and Emotion Wikiversity resource is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:05, 19 November 2019 (UTC)