Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Sharenting motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

@Maddkilby: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:17, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Very good User page Created, with basic description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution Moved from chapter page. Section headings Remove colons See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Well developed 2-level heading structure. Key points Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author first names). Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview and Conclusion would benefit from further development. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References OK. For full APA style, references need reformatting, such as: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Over view of the topic

Hey, page looks great I can see you put together the outline of your chapter which looks really good, it would be good to see in the overview some information on the long term implications of sharenting for both the parent and the child, it seems like a recently studied phenomenon so if that's not available that makes sense, just felt like this would contribute well to building context for motvational lives of the parents and the significance of sharenting.Chelsey.mcnair (discuss • contribs) 03:56, 10 October 2019 (UTC)

Comment

It seems like you're going well on this chapter, I had a read and enjoyed what you have written so far. Perhaps also put a final quiz at the end of the chapter as well as the one you have in middle. You're doing great, keep it up! --U3158296 (discuss • contribs) 23:43, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent Overview. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Good use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Only add interwiki links for the first mention of key words. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. No use of tables. Excellent use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Excellent use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). APA style Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., check capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, minor, social contributions with direct links to evidence, mostly in last 24 hours before chapters were due

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Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video recording quality was excellent. Image sources are provided. A copyright license (general - select a specific Creative Commons license type) for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:46, 17 November 2019 (UTC)