Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Phobias

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Hello! This isn't really a suggestion or anything, but I thought you might find a personal story of mine interesting. When I was much younger, I had an extreme fear of showers. I was so scared of taking a shower. Even if my mom was in the bathroom with me, I would fight her and try not to have to take one. Looking back, I have no idea where this came from. I ended up going to therapy for a few years to fix it. I like turtles, so I remember my therapist having my mom show me one of my turtle toys in the shower. Eventually, I could shower only if my turtle was with me. After a while, I could shower like a regular person, but I sometimes ponder what caused my rather odd phobia. I thought your chapter was really good, and it just got me thinking a bit. I thought you might find it amusing --Dunlapd (discuss • contribs) 14:37, 21 October 2019 (UTC)Dunlapd

Hi there,

I think this is such an interesting topic and thought I'd through a bit of info you way from previous units I have completed. Namely the use of Virtual Reality Technology to assist in combating fears. In particular I have noted Monash University who have set up. technology lab where they have since started conducting trials. Additionally, the Melbourne Royal Children's Hospital has started to employ the technology to assist with distracting children with a fear of needles. Below is a link discussing the research.

https://particle.scitech.org.au/tech/no-more-needle-phobia-with-virtual-reality/

Cheers --U3069703 (discuss • contribs) 07:59, 25 August 2019 (UTC)

Hey, I found that you talked briefly about different types of therapy options and thought it could be good to included a link to the Wikipedia page explaining these types in more detail for those who read that aren't as familiar with them. The link could either be in the see also or where you first mention the topic. For: Cognitive behavioural therapy and exposure therapy. Didn't edit it in the page as I didn't want to disrupt the work. Good luck! --Cass1804 (discuss • contribs) 00:49, 10 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:39, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section. User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Summarised with links to evidence Section headings Well developed 3-level heading structure; avoid sections with only 1 sub-section. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Appropriate emphasis on what can be done about it Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good. For full APA style: Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:21, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

Hey! I really like your page topic, super interesting! I was thinking back to the psych learning unit when I saw that you mentioned classical conditioning and thought of a possible suggestion for your treatment section. Systematic desensitisation is often implemented by behaviourists in the treatment of phobias, so perhaps you could incorporate that into your chapter. If you're interested I found a study with positive results that utilised systematic desensitisation in phobic treatment. http://dx.doi.org.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/10.1037/h0043315

--U3160373 (discuss • contribs) 23:57, 16 October 2019 (UTC) U3160373

A thankful feedback

Hi there, I am glad to be reading your topic. I have struggled a lot doing this book chapter. This is at my own fault, for being overseas for 5 weeks in the middle of the semester. However, I would like to be thank you, and congratulate your work in the finishing stages. Although I mentioned a few similar things to you, such as CBT and Classical conditioning,I did not go into as much detail as you did, about those things, or in my chapter as a whole. I have linked your chapter to mine in the See Also, and I hope anyone who reads my topic, goes to yours for more clarity on phobias. It is more comprehensive and offers more clarity. I see that you have also linked my book chapter to yours, and I hope it is of some interest to you. I wish you luck on the end of your assessment, and I hope you get a great mark. --KBPrimrose (discuss • contribs) 06:52, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Overview - useful case study, consider adding an image and introducing focus questions. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of images. Excellent use of tables. There was no Table 2? Basic use of feature boxes. No use of quizzes. Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. APA style Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

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