My main suggestion at this early stage is to reduce the amount of background information (a lot of this can be briefly summarised with links to more detailed info e.g., on Wikipedia) and expand on content which directly addresses the question "What role does the opioid system play in human emotion?". Also note that there is a word missing in the sub-title. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c06:49, 17 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
This is a reference for Plutchik's original theory of the wheel of emotions in case you need it for you work.
Plutchik, R. (1980). Emotion. A psychoevolutionary synthesis. New York: Harper and Row.
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Use default style for headings (bold and numbers have been removed)
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I suggest reducing the amount of content on brain structures (links can be provided to more information) and focusing more directly on the role that the OS plays in emotion.
A well developed, but somewhat complex 3-level heading structure is provided. This may be somewhat off-putting for someone wanting a user-friendly overview/introduction to the topic - consider simplifying.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
The plan is promising but is almost at the max. word count for chapters, so there will need to be some very significant culling.
There is a risk that this chapter will be overly technical and not user-friendly for an intelligence lay audience. There is also a risk that this chapter will focus on neurological structures and lack sufficient focus on the contribution of the opioid system to emotion.
The Overview argues that opioids are narcotics; but the topic question is really about the endogenous opioid system. So, whilst exogenous opioids may be of some interest, this is really a side issue (e.g., maybe a feature box).
Avoid overly long paragraphs.
Consider revising the focus questions to focus more directly on the topic (i.e., "How does the opioid system influence emotions?"), with brief summaries and links to more info about the other questions.
Check/correct grammar and spelling.
The presentation of brain structures doesn't make a lot of sense because how they link to the opioid system isn't clear explained.
The first relevant section after the "Overview" is "Physiology of opioid system"
Explain and/or provide internal Wikipedia links on first mention of technical terms such as "μ-receptor" - write for a target audience who is unfamiliar with such terms.
The planned information about emotion is very general. Summarise and link to dedicated chapters or Wikipedia articles about emotion. Instead, focus on emotions that are enabled/facilitated by the opioid system. To this end, the single most important suggested section is "Opioid system and the human emotion". Expand this and remove or reduce everything else. Key points in this section are well developed, with relevant citations.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
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Wow - this is a tour de force. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
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Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
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Overall, this is an solid, promising presentation.
This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.
The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Consider removing the initial definition of emotion.
The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was very good but possibly an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
Visual display quality was excellent.
Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided.
