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Your book chapter looks great, one suggestion I would make is to consider the variable of the location of driving. For example, whether mobile phone use while driving occurs more in the city, or whether it occurs more rurally. Perhaps where people drive longer distances. --BMPENFOLD (discuss • contribs) 03:12, 13 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
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Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., Table 1). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
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Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections, however see note above about integrating the general and specific theory sections.
Learning features
Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. ## No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
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Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality had some white noise - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
Visual display quality was basic.
Move the speaker symbol off the slides.
Image sources and their copyright status are provided.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A written description of the presentation is provided.