Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Hope and motivation

Comment

Under hope and self-concept the second dot point needs to made clearer as there is currently one which is just a sentence of counselling techniques so I am unsure of what you meant to do there --Haylzw (discuss • contribs) 08:38, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good User page No info about self or link to book chapter Social contribution 1 claimed but no direct link to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, particularly for the sections which most directly address the topic/question. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Conclusion added References added Key points Key points are well developed for earlier sections, but underdeveloped for the latter sections. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References The formatting varies between references. Resources See also See suggested reformatting External inks None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:25, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I really liked how you incorporated different definitions of Hope because I didn't know that there could be so many meanings regarding that term. Furthermore, I also liked how you expanded on how Hope can either be a motivator or a demotivator.

--U3160221 (discuss • contribs) 11:45, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Interwiki links

@U3177509: Use interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. For example: Who was Nostradamus? Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:17, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Comment

Hi, I thought that looking at hope in popular culture was an interesting topic to explore! I especially loved how you looked into the Disney and Pixar movies and explored how they related to hope motivation. That was really interesting.--U3144248 (discuss • contribs) 20:52, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Overview unnecessary discursion into spirituality. Spirituality may be an aspect of hope but it doesn't warrant being such a major focus of the Overview. Consider adding focus questions. Consider adding a case study. Consider adding an image. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. There is a lack of sufficient citations. The section on hope and faith takes is inexplicably Christian-biased. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. Many statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is mediocre. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Learning features Very basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very basic use of images. Increase display size of Figure 2 to make it easier to read. Basic use of tables. Add table caption per APA style. No use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Hope). Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. Social contribution ~2 logged social contributions with no direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:50, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, insufficient presentation. Structure and content A reasonable, if somewhat bland description of hope theory is provided. The presentation seems to focus more on hope theory itself as opposed to addressing the question "In what ways does hope influence our motivational lives?". Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The Conclusion slide could be strengthened by adding practical, take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is rather pedestrian - a small number of mostly text-based slides presenting using small font size. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Production quality Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. It sounds like an on-board microphone rather than a plugged-in microphone was used to record the audio (e.g., keyboard strokes can be heard). Review set-up. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is not provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:46, 15 November 2019 (UTC)