Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Emotional responses to social robots

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:38, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Mostly a basic, 1-level heading structure (could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure), but also includes a single 4th-level section. Aim for a balanced heading structure.
  2. There is a lack of development of a heading structure that directly addresses the question (e.g., some general emotion theories are mentioned, but these don't seem to be applied to the specific problem).

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview was empty (just repeated the table of contents - this has been removed). Along with the Conclusion, the Overview is the most important section. Consider introducing the topic and the focus questions.
  2. Arguably the most important proposed body section is "What emotional responses do people have to social robots?", but relatively little planned detail is provided.
  3. Current research section doesn't include any citations - perhaps none have been consulted.
  4. The lack of citation indicates that insufficient background reading has been done to build a solid plan.

Image[edit source]

  1. 2 included with APA style captions.

References[edit source]

  1. None provided

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. See past book chapters for examples of how to format
  2. External links
    1. Not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:01, 22 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising, but problematic chapter.
  2. Excellent case study.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Some broadly relevant theories are suggested, but there is room for more deliberature exploration of how these theories help to understand and explain emotional responses to robots.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Several interesting studies are discussed.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  4. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard.
    2. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
    3. Direct quotes are over-used.
    4. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    5. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is poorly structured (see Table of contents).
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    3. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    4. Good use of images.
    5. No use of tables.
    6. Basic use of feature boxes.
    7. No use of quizzes.
    8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
  5. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Hanging indent has been added.
      2. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:12, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good, novel presentation.
  2. This presentation makes creative effective use of voice synthesisation and facerig.
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured, although it relies most heavily on the narration for structure without much content presented visually.
  3. Consider adding and narrating a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of facerig voice synthesisation and robotic visual.
  3. Well paced.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  3. Visual display quality was very good.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is not provided; now added.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:25, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]