Latest comment: 6 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
3 useful contributions with indirect links to evidence (if possible, link to the exact posting). Also try making and summarising a Wikiversity contribution to another book chapter.
Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Consider expanding the Overview e.g., to include focus questions and maybe an example/case study
Note for the section, "What are emotions?" keep it relatively brief, with links to more detail, to allow the chapter to concentrate on addressing the question in the sub-title.
Theories - also consider including psychodynamic theory
Key points are reasonably well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Layout
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
Basic use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding more interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of images.
No use of tables.
Good use of feature boxes.
Basic use of quizzes.
Very good use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
~7 logged, useful, social contributions with (somewhat) direct links to evidence. Appreciated that this showed engagement with the unit processes and just-in-time, practical assistance to peers - thank-you.
Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
A link to and from the book chapter is provided.
A link to the book chapter is not provided.
A written description of the presentation is provided.