Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Effective apology

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Restorative justice[edit source]

Maybe consider linking to the restorative justice chapter. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:20, 28 August 2019 (UTC)

Apology to Australia's Indigenous peoples[edit source]

This may be an interesting example: https://www.australia.gov.au/about-australia/our-country/our-people/apology-to-australias-indigenous-peoples Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:42, 29 August 2019 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Very thorough
  2. Note that the summaries don't have to be this in-depth if you don't want them to be e.g., a numbered list with one line summaries and links to evidence are sufficient.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations and practical examples.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use full journal titles
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:46, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

Interesting Area![edit source]

Hello,

I found this chapter to be a interesting read. Especially in regards to the changing way society functions with the advent of social media. The fact that a mistake from 15+ years ago can resurface online and so often society fails to accept any apology that may have been made on the part of the (much younger and less experienced) offender. I found your use of theoretical models and case study well done and useful.

Thanks for your efforts here

Regards CMIV

CMIV (discusscontribs) 06:57, 16 October 2019 (UTC)

Social contribution[edit source]

I found this chapter interesting to read. You did a good job at explaining Boyds apology model. Great work! --U3158296 (discusscontribs) 01:00, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

I think it's clear you've done a lot of work to your book chapter and it looks great. Have you considered putting in case studies to ensure your explanation is related. --BMPENFOLD (discusscontribs) 07:41, 20 October 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Theory and practice are strengths. The main area for development is the integration of critical review of research.
  2. This chapter is slightly over the maximum word count (e.g., consider abbreviating the Overview; focus questions (repeated) removed from Conclusion).
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits].

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained, with examples.
  2. Perhaps there is more room to consider the role of emotion.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research citations are well integrated, but probably lacks detail/depth.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is very well written.
    2. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with the major section using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Excellent use of embedded links to related book chapters. Other chapter topics to connect to include: sorrow.
    3. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    4. Excellent use of images. Resize images that are difficult to read.
    5. No use of tables. This could be an effective way to summarise the suggested apology steps.
    6. Very good use of feature boxes.
    7. Excellent use of quizzes.
    8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    4. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
  5. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. APA style
    1. Excellent use of APA style for Figure captions. See example.
    2. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations are in full APA style.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. Add spaces between author initials.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~7 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:04, 8 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes creative and effective use of animated slides and text.
  3. An excellent example is used throughout.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  6. Add a title slide.
  7. Minor: There was a spelling error somewhat; and cite refs in alphabetical order.
  8. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  9. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was good although the sound levels varied a bit between pauses and unpauses.
  3. Video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Image source is provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. An excellent written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:03, 17 November 2019 (UTC)