Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Doomsday prepping motivation

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In-Text Citations[edit source]

When you are doing your in-text citations, make sure you put the period after your parenthesis. For example, James is a smart teacher (Neill, 2019).

--Dunlapd (discusscontribs) 14:22, 21 October 2019 (UTC)Dunlapd

DOI display[edit source]

FYI, the current way to display a doi in apa format is to precede it with https://doi.org/

For example doi: 10.1037/arc0000014 should be displayed as https://doi.org/10.1037/arc0000014

For more details see https://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

--U3172958 (discusscontribs) 11:41, 9 October 2019 (UTC)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent/very good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. The presentation is poorly structured. In particular, it lacks a Title, Overview, and Conclusion.
  4. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  5. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  6. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  7. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  8. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Excellent/Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  6. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  7. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  8. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  9. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  5. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good/a bit quiet - review microphone set-up.
  7. Video recording quality was excellent/very good/good/basic.
  8. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  9. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  10. Image sources and their copyright status are/not provided.
  11. A copyright license for the presentation is/not provided.
  12. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  13. A link to the book chapter is/not provided.
  14. A link from the book chapter is/not provided.
  15. A written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:05, 18 November 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:38, 29 August 2019 (UTC)


Hi there, can I suggest that the sub-heading you have for Theory becomes its own outright heading as it doesnt quite fit as to why it is under the Personality heading. Good luck with the research --U3092376 (discusscontribs) 08:56, 30 August 2019 (UTC)

Hello, it was interesting to read your chapter. I noticed two typos: 1. in your Sub-heading3 - should be Neuroticism. And 2. in the paragraph: "Higher score - Calm, self-confident, stable, resilient, and well-adjusted (vs.) Lower score - Neurotic, nervous, insecure, fearful, and anxious" words "Higher score" and "lower score" should swap places so that it reads: Higher score - Neurotic, nervous, insecure, fearful, and anxious. --Lanau3186551 (discusscontribs) 03:13, 3 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi your chapter is really interesting. I did notice how you are lacking some links to outside information I found one interesting one on a reporters experience with doomsday peppers in Australia. It might be interesting to use as an example as well. --Cass1804 (discusscontribs) 23:57, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi there your chapter looks great. Perhaps consider putting quiz questions throughout the chapter rather then one big section at the hand. --BMPENFOLD (discusscontribs) 02:29, 13 October 2019 (UTC) 13:29, 13 October 2019 (UTC)

Hey there, such an interesting chapter. I always find it so amazing when you watch Doomsday Prepper's and that there are actually people out there that prepared. Also just as a heads up, I have had a bit of a review of your article and updated some of the capitalisation. Just for info any mention of theories when you are writing do not need to be capitalised, unless someone's name is a part of it. Cheers, --U3069703 (discusscontribs) 08:54, 20 October 2019 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Good

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. 1 UCLearn discussion posting, with direct link
  2. Also consider making on-wiki contributions

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 3-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author initials).
  3. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  4. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume
    4. Alphabetical order

Resources[edit source]

  1. See reformatting suggestions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:10, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

What a fun topic![edit source]

I would have loved to work on this topic for an entertaining and educational assignment. Lighthearted and fun, with some interesting psychological content as well. I look forward to seeing the version on submission. I have always found the show ridiculous and would like to understand their motivations more.

I would like to contribute some external links to some enjoyable doomsday prep YouTube videos for posterity.

Also, how would the author prep for doomsday after studying this topic?

Underground hideout? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sEcMtw4_UHo

Reinforced Vehicle? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tlBQGkC-IKM&list=PL3wqJcw4CxJhfnz1dGTz7d401ujyasbke&index=30&t=0s

Invisible tree house? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XfXuQLCuMaI&list=PL3wqJcw4CxJhfnz1dGTz7d401ujyasbke&index=36&t=0s

And what would be your doomsday scenario?

Regards CMIV

CMIV (discusscontribs) 10:05, 14 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi i would also like to offer a an external link to a podcast - The survivalist prepper podcast - Thanks u31149665 (9ː35, 20th October. social contributions)

Images[edit source]

Hey,

For images, it would be good to add more of a description in the text box and than link back into your text. Goodluck with your book chapter!

u3096756 --Quinopop (discusscontribs) 23:53, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

The quiz[edit source]

What an interesting topic!! My only thought is that the quiz question was a little confusing, maybe instead of asking what conspiracy thinkers "don't score low" in, you could word it as what they "score high" in, otherwise it's a bit of a double negative! But other than that, really great chapter!! It was very in-depth, and I thought all the theories fit really well in the topic :) --Demimimimi (discusscontribs) 11:46, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Feedback[edit source]

Hi, I just noticed that your in-text citations have the full stop before the authors in brackets. I think it's supposed to be the other way around so that the authors and dates that are relevant to the sentence written are enclosed in the same full stop. e.g. ...affect job satisfaction (Mander et al., 2018).--U3144248 (discusscontribs) 20:37, 20 October 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. This chapter is well over the maximum word count.
    1. Abbreviate the Overview.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. I think it is also important to consider that a certain amount of prepping is desirable and healthy (e.g., saving money for a rainy day, preparing to prevent bushfire and having a bushfire emergency plan, and so on).
  3. A "spectrum" is referred to in two different contexts, but never really explained with clear examples. A table could be helpful here.
  4. The grasshopper and the ant might be a useful fable to refer to, to illustrate that the tension/issue has been around for a long time.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. The quality of written expression is not of professional standard.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use of Interwiki links could be improved (e.g., there are several links to video games in the Overview, but not so many links to other key concepts as they are introduced.)
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes; adjust width of quiz boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas. Commas are overused in this chapter. Often a full-stop and a new sentence would be a better option.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    4. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Doomsday Preppers -> doomsday preppers).
  7. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. See an earlier comment on this talk page about how full-stops should come after not before citations in parentheses.
      2. (Costa, McCrae; 2005) -> (Costa & McCrae, 2005)
      3. Do not use a comma before "et al".
      4. Do not include author initials.
      5. etc.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. See these correcting edits by another user

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~4 logged, useful, social contributions with some indirect and some direct links to evidence


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of moovly animated slides.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. Useful case study.
  3. The presentation lacks a Title, Overview, and Conclusion.
  4. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  5. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  6. Check and correct several typographical errors in the slide text.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animted image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was good.
  3. Visual display quality was good.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  6. Meta-data - why is the video categorised in "how-to"? "Education" is probably better.
  7. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter was not provided (I've added).
  9. A written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:05, 18 November 2019 (UTC)