Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Disgust and vegetarianism and veganism

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PhD candidate working on a related topic[edit source]

You may consider getting in touch: https://twitter.com/annaklas_/status/1166871599636631553 Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:28, 14 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Good

User page[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Consider adding more detail

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. 2 claimed
  2. Add a brief summary of each contribution
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Several standard recommended sections were missing (now added)
  2. Otherwise good
  3. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview/Conclusion - these are the most important sections and need development. Start off by introducing the topic/problem.
  2. Avoid too much background info (e.g., about disgust and vgism as separate concepts) - instead summarise and link to more info, so the main chapter content can focus on their relationship (i.e., "What role does disgust play in vegetarianism and veganism?")
  3. Check and correct APA citation style for a source with three or more authors
  4. The key theory content appears to be well researched, with relevant citations.
  5. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with caption - but use APA style

References[edit source]

  1. Appropriate, but not in APA style e.g.,
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:14, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

Language[edit source]

May be of interest: https://blogs.psychcentral.com/veganism/2019/09/the-power-of-language/ -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:59, 7 October 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Thorough Overview and Conclusion. The focus questions could be refined (i.e., fewer).
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Excellent use of examples.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is very well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is well written, however there are several areas for improvement in grammar.
    2. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is very well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic use of interwiki links; use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Excellent use of embedded links to related book chapters.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. Basic use of tables (include a Table caption).
    5. Good use of feature boxes.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A full stop is needed after "et al".
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
      3. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:12, 11 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. Excellent experiment.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  6. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  7. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was very good.
  3. Visual display quality was very good.
  4. Use sentence casing rather than full capitals.
  5. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:17, 17 November 2019 (UTC)