Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Death anxiety stages

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Hi, I was browsing the book chapters and the subject matter, (Death anxiety) caught my eye. I was reading something interesting the other day related to the topic that suggested that the drive for high self-esteem makes people feel good and reduces the fear and anxiety associated with the inevitability of death by acting as a defence mechanism. The Theory that suggests this proposition is called: 'Terror Management Theory.'

All the best with the development of your book chapter! --U3151962 (discuss • contribs) 10:25, 14 August 2019 (UTC)

Hi, Just a minor suggestion. Perhaps it would be beneficial for you to add more 'Focus Questions' in the Overview section to provide more depth to the chapter. Great job! This particular topic intrigued me whilst I was researching for my own topic "Near-Death Experiences". --U3173837 (discuss • contribs) 17:36, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Well summarised Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Also consider the more recent critiques of sequential death anxiety/grief models Image Provided, with an APA style caption, and cited in text References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct page numbering Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:55, 23 September 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. This chapter is over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good professional standard. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters (e.g., death penalty, suicide) helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Psychologist). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Remove "Retrieved from" for dois; see new doi format. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:52, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Note that there is no need to frame the topic as a clinical one - there is a lot of sub-clinical death anxiety. Reasonably well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. The use of focus questions is a helpful organising structure. The presentation is rather "dry" (e.g., consider adding some examples or more practical, everyday tips). Remove student number from video title. Add sub-title to opening slide. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by expanding the Conclusion slide with easy to read, practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. A lot of the text font size should be larger to make it easier to read. Production quality The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided in a basic way. A copyright license for the presentation is provided . A link to the book chapter is provided, but it does not go to the start of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. A basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:46, 15 November 2019 (UTC)