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8 top-level headings between Overview and Conclusion is probably too many - consider which perhaps can be combined/merged or which can be moved to a lower-level of heading
Expand the dot points to explain more clearly what will be covered.
Citations and references- a mix of wiki referencing and APA style referencing is used - use one style or the other
I like the way you talk about a different kind of perspective regarding your topic! I am interested to read more about your chapter when it is done. As well as, what information or studies that you can discuss about your book chapter. Perhaps, you can talk more about how this different perspective influence law-making regarding prevention? I am looking forward on what kind of preventions are there now that actually works! U3165244
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Hi! I am currently enrolled in the Forensic Psych unit at UC which uses a textbook that is full of fantastic information relevant to your book chapter! I bought the online version of the book here but I am sure you could also find a copy at the library. If you haven't already completed the Forensic Psych unit and are interested in your book chapter topic I would highly recommend it. I hope you find some use from the resource spoken here and that it may assist in the development of your chapter including more challenging topics! Best of luck! --U3160654 (discuss • contribs) 06:53, 13 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
This book chapter looks great, very interesting. I am especially interested in the topic of the locus of control, looking forward to reading when you are finished! I am doing a similar book chapter that focuses on the self-stigma in criminal offenders and think that possibly this article may interest you. It focuses on the role of education in rehabilitation motivation: Education in Prison and the Self-Stigma: Empowerment Continuum by Evans, D., Pelletier, E., & Szkola, J. (2017). Good luck! Maddie
This chapter looks really interesting! I like how it is set out and the quiz you've added to it. Makes it all that more engaging! My chapter isn't similar at all, but I would be really curious to read it when you're done :) I'd imagine there would be a lot of great case studies you could find that might give you some good background info or to justify any ideas you find! good luck!!
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Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See initial comments about perhaps too many top-level headings - is there a better sub-structure?
Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
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Overall, this is a promising chapter with some excellent content, but it needed some harsh editing to meet the word count restrictions, to focus in on addressing the topic and only the topic, and to address topic development feedback.
This chapter is well over the maximum word count. So, there is lots of material that can/should be removed. For example, general material like the 1st paragraph isn't needed - just cut to the chase. A lot of the written expression is convoluted and much more verbose than it needs to be. For inspiration towards leaner and meaner writing, see How to kill a word.
This chapter lacks disciplined focus on the topic and only the topic, tending to wander more broadly into risk indicators for criminality rather than focusing on motivational tools for preventing recidivism.
Conclusion - excellent opening sentence.
The chapter has an inappropriate focus on the Australian context. Earlier feedback was provided about addressing an international audience.
For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
Relevant theories are covered, described, and explained, however more selectivity is recommended - better to use a smaller number of theories well than too many theories.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Layout
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. ## No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
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