Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Circumplex model of affect

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:18, 30 August 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Good Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development (e.g., 2nd level isn't well-developed) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points Key points are reasonably well developed for the early sections, but incomplete or missing for latter sections. Remove or adapt generic template content Write using 3rd person perspective. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Good External links Target link does not watch source listed in brackets

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:45, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to explain a model. The chapter could be improved by providing more readl world examples and explaining the concept in a way that is easier for non-experts to understand. The Overview refers to "a number" of questions; but there are only two focus questions. Consider expanding. Consider adding one or more examples or case studies to the Overview to help bring the chapter to life for a reader unfamiliar with the topic. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is covered, however, the description of the theory is rather abstract and would benefit from more real world, practical examples. Research Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory in a balanced manner. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is not very well written for the target audience. How can the topic be made more appealing and interesting? Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Learning features Basic use of interwiki links; also embed links to related book chapters. Basic use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:46, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a very basic, insufficient presentation. Structure and content Add Overview with focus questions. Basic description of theory. Limited coverage of research. Very few examples. What are the practical take-home messages that a viewer can implement in their everyday lives? Communication The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication makes basic use of images. Production quality Production quality is basic. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was poor (white noise) - review microphone set-up. Video recording quality was OK. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Copyright may have been violated. If so, delete presentation or re-record. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:33, 17 November 2019 (UTC)