Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Anti-anxiety drugs

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title I've added User page Describe self Link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Very basic, 1-level heading structure - would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Basic key points. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is not presented. References APA style references are not provided. Resources Not presented in standard format.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:42, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comment

Looks like you know what you are going to write about, looks well. Maybe add a case study at the beginning to help explain anti anxiety drugs. Great work, keep it up, You're almost there! --U3158296 (discuss • contribs) 23:47, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi! this looks very interesting, i thought this link to the adverse effects of anti-anxiety drugs might be useful: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/6119192 Hope it helps! U3178428 (discuss • contribs) 11:04, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Hello, looking like a good start! you may find this useful: https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/pdf/10.1080/03036758.2017.1358184?needAccess=true. --U3173638 (discuss • contribs) 10:39, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I found an article that discusses case scenarios on generalised anxiety disorders that may help when coming up with case study ideas! https://www.nice.org.uk/guidance/cg113/resources/clinical-case-scenarios-pdf-136292509 --U3160483 (discuss • contribs) 12:23, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:01, 20 November 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter, with some very good content. It is a bit messy around the edges and would benefit from additional drafting and proofreading. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are reasonably well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is reasonably well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. Good use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. No use of tables. No use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. No use of case studies or examples. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). APA style Figures and tables ### Provide detailed APA style Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:01, 20 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising presentation but did not include any audio. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented. The presentation lacks structure (i.e., no Overview or Conclusion). Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The visual communication is interesting and easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of animation but there is no audio. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some audio narration. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was mute - not sure if this was intentional or not? Visual display quality was creative and interesting. Image sources are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided, but goes to a chapter section rather than the beginning. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:15, 20 November 2019 (UTC)