Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Affect regulation theory

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Grammar[edit source]

Hey there,

Just letting you know I had a review of you chapter and made a few minor grammatical changes.

For example under your heading relevant theories and research I made a few word changes, as below:

Relevant theories of relevance towards Affective regulation theory:

Below are a mix of theories and areas of research that demonstrate significant relevance towards affective regulation theory:

Hope that's okay.


--U3069703 (discusscontribs) 17:52, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:55, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

@Quinopop: Just drawing your attention to this suggestion. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:34, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided
  2. Use APA style for caption (italics for Figure X.)
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Also include related Wikiversity book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:56, 27 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does a good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. A strength is that the chapter is quite comprehensive. Areas for improvement include providing a really clear, simple description of the theory and the quality of written expression, including closer referencing.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are considered.
  2. It would be helpful to make the distinction between affect regulation and emotion regulation more clear. Consider adding examples.
  3. Applications and clinical examples are provided.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes sufficient use of research.
  2. Some relevant research is described, but this could be more systematic and discussed in relation to ART.
  3. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  4. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  5. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "below"; instead refer to Figure 1, Table 1 etc.).
    4. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
  3. Learning features
    1. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. For example, this would be ideal for the discussion of applications (e.g., to eating disorders).
    2. Very good use of images. Check order.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Good use of feature boxes. Increase width for quizzes.
    5. Good use of quizzes.
    6. Good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
    3. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    4. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
    5. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Affect).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
      2. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~3 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:14, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  2. The presentation is under the maximum time limit - could slow down.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Promising, but too much content is covered too quickly - be more selective.
  2. There is a lack sufficient scene setting. The sub-title question is not established, so it is difficult for the viewer to know what the presentation is going to be about. There is initial explanation of ART warrants more time being spent on it, because unless it is clearly understood (e.g., include examples), the rest of the presentation doesn't make much sense. This basic explanation is probably more important than "related theories"- instead the presentation starts with a general description of emotion.
  3. There is some promising use of applied examples, but these really need to be tied much more closer to understanding and applying key aspects of ART.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  5. No citations?
  6. No research?

Communication[edit source]

  1. Slow down and leave longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. The font size could be made larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was good. Video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status not provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:10, 15 November 2019 (UTC)