Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Sexting motivation

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:08, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

formatting[edit]

Hey Brittany, I'm super excited to read your page when its completed! In the mean time I happened to notice some formatting errors, I noticed that you had only included the subtitle at the top of your book chapter, make sure to add a title to your page in line with the marking criteria eg. "Sexting motivation: what motivates sexting?". Also, you may want to format your images in line with APA eg. including'Figure 1.' in italics in front of the image name. kind regards Zoe

@U3096514: - Thanks Zoe! I've hopefully fixed my formatting for now :)


Referencing[edit]

Hey Brittany, Your work looks really good. Just a quick note to make sure your references are APA formatted with a hanging indent. Good luck! Chantelle

@Chantellej12: - Thanks for the heads up! I would have completely missed that.


Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. OK

User page[edit]

  1. Very good

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Promising list of contributions
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. Avoid subsections for Overview and Conclusion (have changed heading levels to change this)
  2. Consider using subsections within the main body headings, with a view to reducing the number of main body headings to a maximum (between Overview and Conclusion) around 4 or so
  3. Consider what the take-home messages are going to be (i.e., what are the main motivations for sexting) and see whether it might make sense to reflect these motivators as section headings. In this sense, currently the key section is "Theory". The other sections are interesting but not necessarily clearly directly related to addressing the central topic.
  4. Practical applications section is a useful/promising idea - to move the topic from theory to practice
  5. Unsolicited sexting - yes probably remove, since it is not inherent in the core topic, but probably make mention somewhere - e.g., I guess sometimes (unsolicited) sexting is motivated by harrassment/shock/cyberbullying etc. and that is worth acknowledging. However, if you do keep this section (which is also OK), I like the alternative heading "Why do people send unwanted images and text of a sexual nature to other people?" which is in keeping with the question-based heading style.

Key points[edit]

  1. Reasonably well developed
  2. Overview and Conclusion are under-developed, but are the most important sections
  3. Consider possibly including one or more case studies to help illustrate key points

Image[edit]

  1. Figure 1 - excellent example
  2. Figure 2 - use caption to explain connection to topic

References[edit]

  1. Relevant
  2. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources[edit]

  1. Good - have moved/adjusted
  2. See also - use internal wiki links
  3. External links - include some info about destination/source in brackets after the hyperlink

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:23, 29 September 2018 (UTC)

Eggplant emoji caption[edit]

Hello,

I have noticed you have an eggplant emoji picture without a caption underneath explaining what it means in the context of sexting motivation. I had a quick search because I was interested myself, and this was the first article that came up in google: https://nylon.com/articles/dictionary-emojis-explained-eggplant-penis

You could maybe say something like this for the caption underneath the picture "sexting doesn't always have to be obvious, sometimes it can be more subtle, such that people use particular emojis which signify certain sexual acts or objects."

I hope this helps! Just because not everyone would know what the eggplant emoji is supposed to represent.

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 01:00, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

@Ju3141393: Hey Jess, thanks for the article! I've been meaning to add a caption for a while but haven't really looked into it properly, this really helps!

Adding Peer pressure[edit]

This page is coming along great. I do however, think it may be useful to include the role of peer pressure as a sexting motivation. It seems like this would be a very large motivation for teens. Here is an article that explores this: https://www-tandfonline-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/abs/10.1080/15213269.2013.801725

I have also found an article on cyberbullying and sexting, which I thought may be helpful: http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=0&sid=a129908d-d09d-428f-98ef-b5f4c6fa8ed6%40sessionmgr4007&bdata=#AN=94693840&db=pbh I also think it's really great that you showed that sexting can have a positive benefit if it is used correctly by appropriate age-groups. I hope these links are helpful and I wish you luck with the chapter TaylorMal (discusscontribs) 01:35, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

@TaylorMal: Hi Taylor, I have unfortunately run out of words so I've added the article to my extra resources for now (it was a really interesting study, thanks!) I'm glad you liked the positive aspects! Thank you so much

TED Talk[edit]

Hello,

I found a TED talk for your book chapter: https://www.ted.com/talks/amy_adele_hasinoff_how_to_practice_safe_sexting

I hope this helps!

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 10:00, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

@Ju3141393: Hey Jess, thanks for the video link! This is such a great video

Minor edits[edit]

Hey there, I absolutely love this chapter, its so interesting and I think you have presented it really well with good use of images and external links! I changed your figure captions for you (changed the '-' to a '.' fullstop. I also changed the first letter after your full stops in the chapter to capitals! Again, this is a great chapter, great work! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 05:37, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

@U3160212: Hey Brittany (BTW, we're name twins, my names Brittany too!). Thank you so much, I though I got all the captions but apparently not!

Thoughts[edit]

Hey dude, thanks for adding the indent to the references on my endometriosis chapter, had been meaning to get around to adding that! haha your chapter is amazing :) I loved the use of emojis throughout, I feel like it added a comical element to the chapter! the only thing you may need to consider is that according to my word count app your page is 29 words over the 4400 limit, nothing major, just something to consider perhaps? U3096514 (discusscontribs) 06:25, 21 October 2018 (UTC) U3096514

@U3096514: You're more than welcome Zoe! Thank you so much for the complements! I really enjoy your chapter too, it looks really elegant and well thought out. I keep getting different word counts whenever I check so I think I've just going to risk it for the biscuit for now, thank you for letting me know anyway.


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, this is a very well constructed and written chapter.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Check and correct abbreviations - where i.e. has been used e.g. may be more appropriate.
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Effective use of images.
    3. Effective use of examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Use serial commas.
  1. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and make correct use of italicisation.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content - but be more selective because the presentation narration is too fast.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Like the book chapter, well balanced.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animation based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Video recording quality was excellent.
  3. Audio recording quality is good.
  4. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:51, 18 November 2018 (UTC)