Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Mystical experiences and emotion

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:51, 1 October 2018 (UTC)


Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. OK

User page[edit]

  1. OK

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Links don't go directly to evidence of contributions
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. Structure seems to emphasise mystical experiences but not so much the relationship with emotion?

Key points[edit]

  1. Some key point development
  2. Limited development of Overview and Conclusion - these are the most important sections

Image[edit]

  1. Use APA style
  2. Use figure caption to explain how it relates to one or more key points in the text

References[edit]

  1. OK
  2. Check original date for James references.
  3. Use APA style
  4. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html
  5. You might also be interested to check Robert S. De Ropp's "The Master Game" - there's free pdfs online.

Resources[edit]

  1. See also - also include links to other related Wikiversity book chapter topics
  2. External links - Include info about source/destination in brackets after the hyperlink - see example

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:51, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

This topic is so interesting and very different. I have a few suggests though. I think reading your page I still didn't feel 100% sure on what Mystical experience was. A very simple and clear defintion, perhaps with applied examples, may really help. I also would really like to see a section on how different cultures experience this. I think you would find some very interesting traditions that would surprise many readers. Keep up the good work TaylorMal (discusscontribs) 23:43, 17 October 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an interesting, useful overview of the psychological mysticism. It could be improved by providing more indepth theory and research and more specifically focusing on the relationship with emotion.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Some relevant theory is covered, but there is scope for considering a greater variety of theory (e.g,. neuropsychological[1]).

Research[edit]

  1. Some relevant research is covered (e.g., in relation psilocybin-inducted experiences), but the chapter could be improved by reviewing a broader range of relevant studies, particularly those related to mystical experiences and emotion.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses could be helpful.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. In the general, the chapter is well written and explained.
    2. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, but could be improved by suggesting some practical, take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Basic use of feature boxes.
    5. Good use of quizzes.
    6. Some use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and make correct use of that vs. who.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of capitalisation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 28 November 2018 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this presentation provides a solid overview.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Move cursor off screen
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  6. No written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:59, 28 November 2018 (UTC)