Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Insular cortex and emotion
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- 2 Topic development feedback
- 3 Comments
- 4 Suggestions before due date
- 5 Images
- 6 Chapter review and feedback
- 7 Multimedia feedback
- 8 Chapter resubmission comments
- 9 Multimedia resubmission feedback
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Topic development feedback
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Hi, great topic choice! Sounds really interesting. I just noticed that the diagram of the brain, which points out the amygdala although looks cool I am not certain of its accuracy. As the amygdala is much smaller, and would be difficult to see on an image such as that. If you just google image some diagrams it should give you a much better idea on how the amygdala sits in the brain. So perhaps a different image would get your point across better? Nice job --U3160678 (discuss • contribs) 05:35, 19 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi, I would like to advise you that your references are not currently 100% APA style.
- Journal article issue numbers are only to be included if: the page number of each issue begins with page one, OR if each issue does not begin with the next consecutive page number from the last issue.
- When including doi's the latest APA style begins with https://doi.org/ instead of the previously used 'doi:'
For example your first reference: Mutschler, I., Ball, T., Wankerl, J., & Strigo, I. (2012). Pain and emotion in the insular cortex: evidence for functional reorganization in major depression. Neuroscience Letters, 520(2), 204–209. doi:10.1016/j.neulet.2012.03.095
Mutschler, I., Ball, T., Wankerl, J., & Strigo, I. (2012). Pain and emotion in the insular cortex: evidence for functional reorganization in major depression. Neuroscience Letters, 520, 204–209. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.neulet.2012.03.095
As suggested by J.Neill you may refer to http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html
Suggestions before due date
Hi there, this is an interesting chapter! I just have a few suggestions for you and I have made a few changes, I apologise if you are in the process of changing any of this. Firstly, I fixed a few spelling errors and corrected some words to Australian grammar (s instead of z for example) although I may have missed some so it would be a good idea to check this before tomorrow, in the same light, many sentences don't make sense or are incomplete so you may want to check over each paragraph (sorry if you're in the process of doing this). I also changed your figure captions to start off with APA, although I would recommend changing the content to relate to the topic you are talking about. I also made some minor APA changes to your in text referencing, such as replacing '&' with 'and' when referring to researchers in the text (not in the brackets), and also added another comma after researchers names within the brackets, for example (Motivation, Emotion & Book, 2018) should be (Emotion, Motivation, & Book, 2018). Some external links would be worth adding too. I hope these help, good luck and good work! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 07:09, 21 October 2018 (UTC)
I am terrible with placing images, feel free to move them to what would seem appropriate. thanks
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Chapter resubmission comments
The main changes were:
- The quality of written expression, including grammar, has been improved.
- More interwiki links have been added, including to other relevant book chapters.
- A table was added.
- Coverage of research has been improved.
- A quiz was added.
Multimedia resubmission feedback
- The presentation has a logical structure.
- The meta-data is excellent.
- This is a basic text-slide and narrated audio style presentation.
- This presentation provides only a very rudimentary synthesis of theory and research about the role of the IC in emotion.
- The presentation doesn't begin to directly address the topic until at least half-way.