Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Impulse buying motivation

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This is a great start to your page. It is well structured and comprehensively researched. I noticed in your overview you had a dot point addressing "what is motivation" it may be better to provide a link to the motivation wikipage rather than adressing it in your overview section. You could include this in your "see also" section - motivation(wikipedia). --Bridie Mcinerney (discusscontribs) 01:50, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Jess! Love how your page is coming along! I made a few minor changes to your headings, Wikiversity only has capitals on the first word of headings, so I just adjusted that! I also found this article that may be of help when discussing personality and impulse buying: hope that helps :) --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 07:28, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

Hi there! First of all, well done. This book chapter has been thoroughly researched. I have two minor suggestions for this chapter. The first one is to add some kind of interactive component such as a quiz or a case study to intrigue the reader further. The secod suggestion is to turn your dot-points into full sentences and paragraphs. Again, great job! --BB7897 (discusscontribs) 22:19, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Jess! Your chapter is looking great for now. I would recommend that you add some content between your main headings and the subheading possibly explaining the content to follow, this should help with the flow of your chapter. I look forward to seeing the completed chapter! Good luck --Brittany (u3117719) (discusscontribs) 02:10, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Very good
  2. Wikiversity links don't go directly to evidence of contributions (it should be easy to see the changes you made at first glance, without any searching)
  3. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. Extensive 2-level structure - looks good, overall. I wouldn't add much more. If anything, keep it simpler (e.g., probably don't need "Psychological theory" as a stand-alone section - relevant content could be integrated elsewhere.

Key points[edit]

  1. Excellent; really well developed


  1. Very good
  2. Expand figure caption to explain how it relates to one or more key points in the text (e.g., for Figure 1 - especially as window shopping isn't impulse buying per se)


  1. Excellent
  2. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see


  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:23, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


i just wanted to provide a layout section for your focus questions. Maybe use a box for the focus questions and a coloured one two so that it emphasises on your focus questions for your book chapter.

here is a link to the pretty boxes page that will provide you with boxes you can use! there are coloured ones too :)

U3160397 (discusscontribs) 21:57pm, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.


  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.


  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is very well written.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. Good use of feature boxes.
    4. Basic use of quizzes.
    5. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas.
    2. Check and make correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. APA style
    1. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
    2. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References use correct APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:54, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content.
  2. Overall, the presentation is probably too fast, so consider being more selective about what to cover.
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  4. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  5. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  6. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).


  1. The presentation is fun and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Images sources are acknowledged.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 3 December 2018 (UTC)