Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Guilt and shame

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Journal article suggestion[edit]

Hey there, I have just added the template suggested by James Neill to your page so you have a starting point for your book chapter. I have also found an interesting article from the UC Library titled 'Shame and Guilt in Child Sex Offenders'; I believe this will be a really interesting starting point and I hope you find this useful!--U3097480 (discusscontribs) 07:14, 23 August 2018 (UTC)

Article suggestion[edit]

Hey Spalacioaa, Can't wait to see what you come up with for this chapter! In doing some research for the chapter on guilt I came across an article about denial of guilt in the post war lives of Nazi perpetrators and thought it might be of interest to you too! In general, the repercussions of any genocide is laced with guilt and shame and may be of interest to you as a broader topic. kind regards Zoe

Journal article suggestion[edit]

Hey there! i am doing cognitive dissonance as a topic and i found that guilt and shame are consequences of the occurrence of cognitive dissonance. It is a really interesting topic which you could mention. Here is an interesting article that might be relevant to your topic. it is in regards to guilt, and ethical consumption choices. Good Luck, Jo Joog 17 (discusscontribs) 12:56, 02 September 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Excellent
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. OK
  2. The most important section in terms of addressing the topic is "Shame and guilt correlations". Perhaps reconsider the use of the word "correlations" here - e.g., something like "relationship" may be better.
  3. Perhaps consider moving the sections about similarities and differences up higher/making them more prominent.
  4. There's no particular need to address gender differences unless there are gender differences in the relationship between guilt and shame.
  5. Given the guilt and shame are both self-conscious emotions, perhaps add a section early on describing self-conscious emotions and how/why guilt and shame are considered as such.

Key points[edit]

  1. Basic development.
  2. See suggestions about section headings.
  3. Conclusion is underdeveloped - but is probably the most important section.


  1. OK
  2. Consider rewriting caption to more clearly illustrate how the image connects to key points in the text


  1. Good
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see


  1. OK

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:41, 30 September 2018 (UTC)


Hi, you have a very interesting topic and I look forward to seeing the final piece. I'm a big fan Brene Brown who is a "research story-teller" who has spent the last 16 years studying shame and guilt, but also courage, vulnerability, and empathy to name a view. Here is a link to two of her best TedX talks. She is very engaging and entertaining to listen to. I think her talks could really help you understand you topic and the implications of guilt and shame on emotions. Article by B.Brown: TedX talk: Good luck. Lucy --Lucy Hanrahan (discusscontribs) 22:21, 16 October 2018 (UTC)


Hi there, I hope its okay, but I have changed some spelling and grammatical errors. Also just a reminder to insert a hanging indent into your reference list. There are instructions on the motivation and emotion discussion page if this helps; Thanks, --U3154928 (discusscontribs) 01:43, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:15, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address practical, real-world phenomena.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.


  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Theories are simply explained.


  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter is reasonably well written (simple, easy to read), but there are some minor, consistent grammatical and spelling errors.
    2. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    4. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Check and make correct use of that vs. who.
    2. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. Good use of images.
    4. Good use of feature boxes.
    5. Good use of quizzes.
    6. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of italicisation.
      2. See new doi format.
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:01, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.



  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Theory is well explained; there could be more coverage of research.


  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  3. Images sources and their copyright is well acknowledged.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:13, 28 November 2018 (UTC)