Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Goal sharing and goal pursuit

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Layout Suggestion[edit source]

Hi, This topic is really seems really interesting, just letting you know that you could possibly use collapse boxes with some of your sections. As this just provides a more neater look to the page to make it less cluttered. You may want to use this on the studies of the 'low down' section.



U3160397 (discusscontribs) 13:13, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

Hi Kunalǃ I've just fixed up the captions to your images. Great case study, very relatableǃ --Caroline Gangotena (discusscontribs) 11:29, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Hey! This might be an interesting TED talk for you to listen to --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 23:01, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

This study might also be interesting for you, I have linked it in your reference list too If the link doesn't work, the article is called Making SMART goals smarter --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 22:13, 7 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I am also doing a topic on goal setting and thought you might like this reference from Locke and Latham as a starter reference. It notes the mechanisms behind but probably more relevant for you is the satisfaction section which would relate to the motives of goal sharing. "Locke, E. A., & Latham, G. P. (2002). Building a practically useful theory of goal setting and task motivation: A 35-year odyssey. American psychologist, 57(9), 705." It would be interesting to see information about the link between sharing a goal, attaining the goal and the neurotransmitter response (such a dopamine). Good luck, Chantelle (u3141099). --Chantellej 12 (discusscontribs) 06:00, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Loving the "picture this" scenario for your overview, maybe this could be put into a feature box? Also, remember to use APA formatting for all images (i.e Figure 1). This looks like an interesting topic and I am excited to see the end result. Keep up the good work. --Abbsu3163507 (discusscontribs) 02:04, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

Suggestion[edit source]

I can't wait to see the final product of this chapter. Just a suggestion for your 'picture this' box - it is a great example, you just have 'no me' written when it should be 'new me'. Also consider closing the box after the scenario, and explain the theory etc underneath. Keep going, you're doing great!--Lauren.ianson (discusscontribs) 06:04, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on work so far[edit source]

Here's some suggestions about work so far on this chapter:

  1. The most important content added so far is the three dot points in the section "How does sharing one's goals with others affect goal pursuit?" - expanding on these and related points, covering theory, research, and with practical applications or examples etc. could make for a reasonable chapter
  2. The content in the "Theories" sections look to be less relevant, unless the intention is to relate the these theories to the specific topic for the chapter
  3. The content in "Best ways to set goals" looks less relevant as well - probably better to contribute this content to the Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Goal setting techniques chapter unless the intention is to shape this section to the current chapter's specific focus
  4. The most important sections will be the Overview and Conclusion, so consider prioritising their development
  5. Consider possible of use of interwiki links, images, tables, quiz, examples/case studies etc.
  6. References - Use APA style

Hope this helps. Feel free to follow anything help. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:20, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but solid/sufficient chapter.
  2. Overview could benefit from use of focus questions.
  3. Heading structure could be improved by using concepts rather than authors
  4. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is reasonably well covered and focused directly on the topic.
  2. Theories and research are discussed separately; a stronger approach would be to integrate discussion of theory and research.

Research[edit source]

  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  2. Focus less on individual studies and more providing a critical synthesis.
  3. Down to earth explanation.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Use third person perspective rather than second person perspective (e.g., "you").
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. Reasonably good use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of quiz questions.
    6. Some use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of commas.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    3. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
    4. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    5. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions. Expand the captions to explain how the images are relevant to key points being made in the text.
    3. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    4. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    5. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct italicisation.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of slides and video.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and video/audio.
  3. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, excellent all round production quality.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  3. Image sources are acknowledged.
  4. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:33, 17 November 2018 (UTC)