Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Familicide motivation
- 1 Feedback from Louise
- 2 Journal article suggestion
- 3 Suggestion for sources
- 4 News article
- 5 Editing suggestions
- 6 Topic development feedback
- 7 feedback
- 8 Chapter review and feedback
- 9 Multimedia feedback
Feedback from Louise
Your chapter is looking awesome. The 'overview' really sparked my interest and the quotes and case studies help to make the topic real. I like the way you have clearly defined the key terms used and linked to another chapter within the body of your chapter. I am looking forward to seeing how you bring it all together in the 'conclusion'.
The following report might help provide further context and ideas for future research and reducing the prevalence: Australian Domestic and Family Violence Death Review Network - Data Report 2018 --Louise Wheeler (discuss • contribs) 00:27, 18 October 2018 (UTC)
- @Louise Wheeler: Hi Louise, thank you so much I really appreciate that! That is a very interesting article, thank you for bringing it to my attention! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 03:26, 18 October 2018 (UTC)
Journal article suggestion
Hey, I was having a look through your book chapter thus far and I found the information really interesting and I can't wait to see the finished product! I had a quick look at some peer-reviewed journal articles and I came across one that I thought might be of interest to you, called 'patterns of multiple familicy homicide' from the UC Library; http://journals.sagepub.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/pdf/10.1177/1088767913511460 I hope you find this useful!--U3097480 (discuss • contribs) 06:41, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
- @U3097480: Hi, thank you so much for your contribution! I'll definitely take the article into consideration when writing and researching for the familicide section of the chapter. The article looks super interesting, thank you again! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 01:58, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
Suggestion for sources
Hey. Youre chapter is coming along really well and I found it very interesting, looks like youll get some good marks, especially with integrating theory! Feel free to have a look at my chapter (elder abuse impacts on emotion) as I have a table on there that describes some of the theories as to why elder abuse may occur; and I think you may be able to integrate a few of them into yours. --Emeraldcahill94 (discuss • contribs) 05:47, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
- @Emeraldcahill94: Hi, thank you! I'll be sure to check that out :) --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 05:16, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi there, this sounds like a really interesting topic! I was looking at news articles about parents killing their children and came across this article about a mother who killed her young son - it might make for some interesting reading. Hope your research goes well! --U3117719 (discuss • contribs) 04:54, 1 September 2018 (UTC)
- @U3117719: Hi, thanks so much for your contribution! Wow that is a very scary and sad story, thank you for bringing it to my attention! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 07:25, 1 September 2018 (UTC)
Suggestion re: in text citations I noticed there are a few in text citations that do not adhere to APA formatting (mostly the year has not been included). Might be a good idea to check over this in the final edit. U3037801 (discuss • contribs) 03:09, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
- @U3037801: Hi there, thank you, I hadn't quite finished my editing yet, it should all be fixed now! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 05:33, 9 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi, I really enjoyed reading this chapter. As someone doing a psychology/law double degree, criminology is one of my favourite areas to read about so this fit right in. I didn't realise that the statistic regarding being more likely to be killed by someone you know was gendered so that was interesting to learn. Your page is also visually really nice and interactive. My only suggestion would be that there are parts, particularly in the overview and conclusion where you have added an emotional tone. While this in itself isn't and issue, some of these emotive statements don't particularly add anything to the chapter. Some examples include the "and good reason" in the first sentence of the overview and "occur far too often" in the first sentence of the conclusion. Either way though, this was an interesting chapter. Good luck. - U3144461 4:58, 21 October 2018.
- @U3144461: Hi there, thank you so much I really appreciate that! It sure is an interesting topic and I found many of the stats interesting during my research, if only I could include more! You're absolutely right about my tone, I guess I get a little carried away after reading so much tragedy, I have gone through and tried to fix that. Again, thank you! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 06:34, 21 October 2018 (UTC)
Topic development feedback
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Excellent topic, the various colours helps the flow and makes following it easy. one suggestion, maybe move the familcide section up the page as it is more an an introduction to the overall chapter. i hope that helps
- @Jonathan Sheehan UC: Hi there, thanks for having a look at my chapter! Unfortunately your suggestion is too late, as this assignment is already submitted! But thank you anyway! --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 03:42, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
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