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Using questions is a good way to frame the top-level, main body headings
Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections
The most important section (besides the Overview and Conclusion) is "How do endorphins affect motivation?". The preceding sections, to the extent that they are generic (e.g., about endorphins, not endorphins and motivation), they keep them brief, with links to more info on dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia pages. That will allow the bulk of this chapter to concentrating on its core topic.
Although the chapter is about E and motivation, presumably part of the answer is the effect of E on emotion, with emotion contributing to motivation. So maybe tease this out and embed link to endorphins and emotion (Book chapter, 2015) for more detail.
Conclusion - develop the take-home messages - questions may be better suited to the Overview (e.g., focus questions)
I think this page is going to be so interesting. I think that it will be very important to use a lot of hyperlinks and pictures to describe neurological jargon. Remeber that part of the criteria for the assignment is for it to be read by an educated lay person who may not understand a lot of neruoscience. I think this chapter is going to be great TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 23:52, 17 October 2018 (UTC)
Overall, there is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about endorphins and motivation as separate constructs). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).