Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Chronic pain and maladaptive behaviour

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Hi, I book chapter looks great. I made some APA corrects to your references for you. However, you may still need to add the rest of the authors to the first to references and add the "doi:" to these 2 references: Katz, J., Rosenbloom, B. N., & Fashler, S. (2015). Chronic pain, psychopathology, and DSM-5 somatic symptom disorder. The Candian Journal of Psychiatry, 60, 160-167. Turk, D. C., Swanson, K. S., & Tunks, E. R. (2008). Psychological approaches in the treatment of chronic pain patients - when pills, scalpels and needles are not enough. The Canadian Journal of Psychiatry, 53, 213-223. --GabiK (discusscontribs) 00:27, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I added some extra descriptions to some of your images, you may want to add further descriptions to the rest of the images to link them more with the text. Good Luck. --GabiK (discusscontribs) 00:53, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Just a quick notice on your photo titles. Please pay attention to the order of the photos. --U31455 (discusscontribs) 19:55, 2 September 2018

Hi, what a great topic! Just added a few commers and fixed a couple grammerical issues. Nothing big. Good luck --U3160678 (discusscontribs) 22:48, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I've really enjoyed reading your chapter. The specified case studies with the areas was a nice touch. The only thing I would recommend is that there are some concepts that would benefit by having hyperlinks to the relevant wikipedia pages. Otherwise it's a good read and visually has a lot going for it. - U3144461 16:05 21 October 2018.

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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rather than

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:19, 19 September 2018 (UTC)

Comments[edit]

Drug use as a form of maladaptive behaviour? managing chronic pain is something that comes to mind that might give weight to some of your thoughts and argument. Although meeting a need to help ease the pain drug use may invariably at some stage turn into dependency or indeed addiction [Refer to the DSM I think substance use disorder is the current preferred term at this stage] Some have suggested that there is currently a pandemic of over prescribed pain medication in the USA [See Oxicontin and other opiate based pain medications Fentinil may be another identified problem drug] The weight of this as an issue that may be useful for you topic is that there are currently more over doses from prescribed medications than illicit drugs in the USA? It may also be useful to weave the work of Jon KAbat Zinn who developed Mindfulness Based Stress Reduction (MBSR) Zinn is considered the Godfather of introducing Mindfulness based practices into western medicine into your writing. MBSR has been used extensively with chronic pain presentations this may be a useful contrast to a maladaptive behaviour ie: drug use, sedentry lifestyles, poor eating habits and nutrition - Luke o

Here are a couple of articles for you. https://www-sciencedirect-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S0049017202000951 is about the problems that practitioners may face assisting the elderly with chronic pain. https://www-cochranelibrary-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/cdsr/doi/10.1002/14651858.CD002014.pub3/full is about a behavioural treatment for chronic lower back pain (if it doesnt work, go through UC library - Behavioural treatment for chronic low‐back pain (Henschke et al., 2010). It may also be interesting to determine the effects of not treating the chronic pain, either effectively or in an adequate amount of time. Good luck for next week! --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 04:56, 15 October 2018 (UTC)


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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

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  1. Very good

User page[edit]

No comment

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Links doesn't go directly to evidence of contribution
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. OK
  2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Descriptions of chronic pain and maladaptive behaviour probably don't need two top-level headings - e.g., merge with Overview or subsequent sections, to allow chapter structure to focus on the core topic (the subtitle).
  4. Shorten the heading for "So why do we do maladaptive behaviours when chronic pain is experienced?"
  5. Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections

Key points[edit]

  1. Overall, minimal development with mostly empty sections; difficult to make much constructive comment at this stage.
  2. A clear understanding of maladaptive behaviour is needed - e.g., malaptative according to what criteria?

Image[edit]

  1. Very good
  2. Expand figure captions to explain how images relate to one or more key points in the text

References[edit]

  1. Very good - but not all have been cited.
  2. Check and correct use of APA style for issue numbers.
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources[edit]

  1. See also - excellent
  2. External links - not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:16, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Photo[edit]

Hey

  1. Photo number 2 is not mentioned while photo number 7 mentioned twice.
  2. I have changed the intext FIGURE 1 to figure 1 and photo description of figure 1,3,4,5,7,7 to Italic
  3. This link may help you for future figure addressing: http://libguides.unitec.ac.nz/apareferencing/images-tables-figures

--U31455 (discusscontribs) 11:24, 18 October 2018

  1. excluded Figure 1 other figures did not mention in the text and only figure 6 has a description. I suggest you add some description for all photos or mention them in the text.

--U31455 (discusscontribs) 13:29, 18 October 2018


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably solid chapter. Theory is well covered. Examples are provided. Perhaps it could be improved by providing a more indepth review of relevant research. The quality of written expression (particularly grammar and spelling) needs improvement to be of a professional standard.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Perhaps greater consideration of central pain modulation theories would be appropriate.

Research[edit]

  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    2. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Excellent use of illustrative quotes - perhaps also include some which illustrate application of the suggested strategies for coping with pain in a way that leads to adaptive behaviour.
    3. Images and quizzes are well used.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    3. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    4. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
    5. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    6. Use serial commas.
    7. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. APA style
    1. A serial comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors.
    2. Use APA style when referring to figures (capitalisation).


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon animation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section (i.e., good theory, room for more review of research).
  2. Consider adding a list of chronic pain maladaptive behaviours.
  3. In general well selected and structured content, although perhaps the content could be stripped down further, to help better emphasise a smaller number of key points.
  4. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion) - also include the sub-title.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow and reasonably interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. Consider leaving slightly longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. The visuals aid understanding of the narrated audio.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Images sources other than Powtoon are not acknowledged.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:21, 13 November 2018 (UTC)