Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Adolescent educational motivation

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Hi, I would like to advise you that your references are not currently 100% APA style.

  1. Journal article issue numbers are only to be included if: the page number of each issue begins with page one, OR if each issue does not begin with the next consecutive page number from the last issue.
  2. When including doi's the latest APA style begins with https://doi.org/ instead of the previously used 'doi:'

For example your first reference: Bandura, A. (1993). Perceived self-efficacy in cognitive development and functioning. Educational Psychologist, 28(2), 117-148. doi:10.1207/s15326985ep2802_3
Should be:
Bandura, A. (1993). Perceived self-efficacy in cognitive development and functioning. Educational Psychologist, 28, 117-148. https://doi.org/10.1207/s15326985ep2802_3


Hey there, your chapter looks great, it is catching and creates interest to the reader. Here is a link https://files.eric.ed.gov/fulltext/EJ885706.pdf to the article I thought would be useful for your chapter. Best of luck. --(UTC)--Reet josan (discusscontribs) 11:55, 21 October 2018 (UTC)'Reet josan

Hey there, the chapter sounds really intriguing and flows well and creates an interest.I found an article which can be useful https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fpsyg.2017.00076/full .dsaini3 (discusscontribs) 11:58, 21 October 2018 (UTC)'Dsaini3


Hey there, just wanted to say the start of your chapter is going really well, the starting paragraph really captivaties the reader!--Emeraldcahill94 (discusscontribs) 07:36, 5 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Louise, I just wanted to shoot you a couple of suggestions for potential references - hope that's ok. The first is Academic self-concept, autonomous academic motivation, and academic achievement: Mediating and additive effects. (2010). Guay, Ratelle, Roy, Litalien. The other info I found that may be useful is a database of factors affecting academic achievement, along with their level of effect: http://www.evidencebasedteaching.org.au/hatties-2017-updated-list/ Hope this might be useful in some way... Good luck! Cheers, Dot--Foley.d (discusscontribs) 01:00, 23 August 2018 (UTC)

Thank you Foley.d.--Louise Wheeler (discusscontribs) 05:00, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

Louise I also found a reference that might be useful for your chapter on adolescent education motivation (see link below).

https://www.psychology.org.au/inpsych/2013/december/martin/

--U3037801 (discusscontribs) 07:33, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

Thank you. This is an interesting article. --Louise Wheeler (discusscontribs) 00:27, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

Great work Louise! Nice use diagrams to make easier for the readers to understand written part of the chapter; clear and easy to understand headings and sub-headings; Well researched; conclusion was well-outlined with future recommendations.--Muhammad M Rahman (discusscontribs) 15:32, 2 November 2018 (UTC)


Self Efficacy theory [May be worthwhile having a look at?][edit source]

May be useful to consider the work of Bandura in relation to education his body of work is considered seminal heres a few journal articles to get you going

https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Karen_Multon/publication/232450715_Relation_of_self-efficacy_beliefs_to_academic_outcomes_A_meta-analytic_investigationJournal_of_Counseling_Psychology_38_30-38/links/0c96052a225456a6b5000000/Relation-of-self-efficacy-beliefs-to-academic-outcomes-A-meta-analytic-investigationJournal-of-Counseling-Psychology-38-30-38.pdf

https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Barry_Zimmerman/publication/247480203_Self-efficacy_and_educational_development/links/549b67770cf2b80371371ad5.pdf#page=219

[Luke O]


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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Title casing adjusted
  3. Sub-title wording adjusted

User page[edit source]

  1. Minimal
  2. Suggest linking to chapter you are working on

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Social contributions that count for marking purposes are those that go beyond one's primary book chapter
  3. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Some promise, but could probably do some further consideration/tweaking.
  2. Generic sections such as "What is motivation?" and "What is special about adolescents?" should be kept brief or consider subsuming into the Overview or other sections and just providing brief info, with links to more dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia articles on these topics. This will allow the current chapter to focus more directly and purposely on addressing its unique topic: "How can we enhance adolescent motivation at school?"
  3. Consider the possibility of synthesising theories and strategies
  4. Consider moving one or more case studies to the beginning, to help engage the reader with some practical scenarios
  5. Consider include neurobiological perspectives based on adolescent brain development (e.g., why afternoon/evening schooling might better suit teenage brains)
  6. Case studies probably doesn't need its own section - they can be embedded in other sections using some sort of feature box

Key points[edit source]

  1. Some useful ideas.
  2. Main suggestion is to make sure each section is directly and demonstrably addressing the the topic.
  3. Also comments about section headings.
  4. Conclusion - this is arguably the most important section - expand on the take-away messages

Image[edit source]

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References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:26, 30 September 2018 (UTC)

New APA style for DOI referencing[edit source]

  1. The volume should be erased and the number of volumes should be in italic.
  2. Instead of doi:, http://doi.org/ should be used.
  3. The name of the pulisher also should be in italic.


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Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
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Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

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  1. Written expression
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    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
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    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is reasonably well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. Possibly a more meaningful heading than "Relevant theories" could be used.
    4. References use correct APA style.


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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. The presentation is accessible and has practical, take-away messages.
  3. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
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  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Add the full chapter title and sub-title into the description on Wikimedia Commons - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Audio recording includes keyboard clicks - review microphone set-up.
  5. Great job putting the presentation into .ogg format and into Wikimedia Commons.
  6. Images sources and their copyright is well acknowledged.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:06, 18 November 2018 (UTC)