Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Testosterone and dominance

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This may be moderately off-topic and borderline offensive but I've always wondered why men (my friends and male relatives, at least, very much so) seem to have disgust for homosexual advances on them whereas women seem not only more calm and able to brush unwanted interest off, but can even be more experimental without altering their perception of their sexuality. Is there a relationship between higher testosterone levels, the need to dominate, and a sense of alarm or threat that occurs when some men are approached by other men? Or, is this a result of environmental factors? Is there a power balance at play and how does this weave into a man's identity? --Taylormeggles (discuss • contribs) 05:21, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

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Thanks Taylor for your feedback! This is a very interesting point and I will definitely be looking into it during my research.

--Amelia Smith-Koppie (discuss • contribs) 14:15, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

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Hey there! I am doing the other Testosterone related topic: Testosterone and Sexual motivation. So I am really interested in keeping up to date with what you are doing, as I imagine they tie in together quite well. I have had a few really interesting suggestions on my page that I thought I would share with you alongside some of my own thoughts. You could potentially include sections related to

• Sex crimes
• Individual differences such as gender, age and/or sexuality

I think it would also be interesting to discuss dominance in relation to performance in the bedroom and - on the other end of the scale - the workplace! Id also love to see some information on what happens when there is a large gathering of men: whether their testosterone levels spike with the desire to be the most "manly" in the room! I'm not sure if this is a real occurrence: but I would love to find out if this is a myth or a fact!

Anyway! Good luck! I hope I have provided you with some interesting feedback :) Demibree (discuss • contribs) 08:35, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

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Thanks Demibree! I will be including sex crimes in my case study section. Amelia Smith-Koppie (discuss • contribs) 14:29, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

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Hi again Amelia,

In your 'sex crimes' case study section you say that 'hypo-sexuality' could be associated with sex offenses due to higher testosterone. However hypo- is a prefix meaning 'low'. Do you mean to say 'hyper'?--Taylormeggles (discuss • contribs) 01:35, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:37, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Created, basic Social contribution None logged Section headings Simple 2-level heading structure - looks like a good start, if somewhat basic approach - importantly, it shows an emphasis on theory See earlier comment about heading casing Consider integrating discussion about theory, research, with examples (as opposed to having separate sections about theory and research) Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Make sure to avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter. Key points Some development of ideas within most sections Consider using more examples Consider using more in-text interwiki links (makes the text more interactive) Consider moving a case study or other examples higher and integrating, say, within the Overview, to help capture reader interest earlier on Image One image provided and captioned - perhaps this image should occur earlier? Consider increasing image size from default References Good. For full APA style, consider capitalisation, italicisation, use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html, and do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:37, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

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Hey there! Read through your chapter and it all looks like it is coming together really well! The only comment I have is this sentence took me a few goes to understand "Leydig cells convert cholesterol like substances into testosterone when luteinising hormone is sent from the pituitary gland." I was going to just edit the page and put a "a" or "the" in between when and luteinising, but I was unsure if that would be correct? Maybe review that whole sentence and reword as the sentence doesnt really flow. Other than that, good job! :) U3111270 (discuss • contribs) 09:41, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:23, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. Ideally, provide more integration of theories about dominance and theories about testosterone. Also consider testosterone changes in sport as a result of winning and losing. Research Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Testosterone as a predictor of criminal activity seems like a highly speculative and problematic practical implication. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression is reasonable. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned" Layout The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing Learning features Interwiki links are well used. Basic use of images. No use of tables. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the tags. Semi-colons are over-used - in most cases, a colon would be more appropriate The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the tags. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct italicisation See new doi format Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

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Overall Overall, an excellent presentation! Structure and content Very good selection and organisation of content Good use of example at the beginning Great emphasis on practical implications Conclusion was helpful - beyond the time limit Citations provided, but no references? Communication Speak to the title slide and section title slides Excellent narration voice Excellent use of animation Production quality Overall, very well produced Presentation is over max. length Use the book chapter title and subtitle for the video title and for the title slide

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:26, 26 November 2017 (UTC)