Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Stigma and emotion

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Title of book chapter[edit]

Really interesting topic! However, I suggest putting the title of the book chapter in lower case - Basically, "Stigma and emotion" "What are the emotional effects of being stigmatised?" which is how it is on the motivation and emotion contents page. The reason for this I believe, is that sites like Wiki use lower cases for their titles rather than formal like an essay would. --KR96 (discusscontribs) 23:44, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

Journal articles[edit]

Great topic! Your outline mentioned finding some relevant theories - here are a couple of articles that might help?
The first one talks about the impact of different emotion regulation strategies (rumination, suppression, social support) on stigma outcomes. The second one uses an stress-coping model - if a person appraises the harm of stigma as exceeding their perceived coping resources they will experience stress, which can include emotional reactions such as social anxiety and shame. They suggest interventions targeting these emotional reactions could reduce negative outcomes from stigma. In context of mental illness stigma but might apply more broadly too?
Hatzenbuehler, M. L., Nolen-Hoeksema, S., & Dovidio, J. (2009). How does stigma “get under the skin”? The mediating role of emotion regulation. Psychological Science, 20, 1282-1289. doi:10.1111/j.1467-9280.2009.02441.x
Rüsch, N., Corrigan, P. W., Powell, K., Rajah, A., Olschewski, M., Wilkniss, S., & Batia, K. (2009). A stress-coping model of mental illness stigma: II. Emotional stress responses, coping behavior and outcome. Schizophrenia research, 110, 65-71. http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/j.schres.2009.01.005
--u3122707 (discusscontribs) 22:59, 25 August 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:23, 1 September 2017 (UTC)


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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Very good
  2. Capitalisation has been corrected since submission

User page[edit]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Excellent

Section headings[edit]

  1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  1. Very detailed 3-level heading structure - in general, this is good, but perhaps it is overly detailed and make break up the flow. A general guide is that if there is only one paragraph, except the Overview and Conclusion, it probably doesn't justify a separate heading.
  2. May need to be more selective about which theories to focus on e.g., what are the most important 2 to 4, with briefer mention of the others. In general, stronger chapters are more selective of the top theories and provide good coverage about these, rather than trying to cover a little bit about lots of different theories.

Key points[edit]

  1. Key points provided for some but not all sections.

Image[edit]

  1. Two relevant images included, with relevant APA style captions
  2. Consider increasing image size from default

References[edit]

  1. Good. For full APA style, check how to report issue numbers, use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html, and do not include page numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Also include the source (e.g., destination and/or author) in brackets after the link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:17, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:54, 21 November 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter. It is theory-heavy and lacks practical, take-home messages.
  2. Why focus on those with mental illness and obesity?
  3. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Stigma theories were well described and explained, but the chapter errs on the side of being theory-heavy and lacks practical implications.
  2. More everyday, practical examples (besides the somewhat unnecessarily large emphasis on mental illness and obesity) could be useful.

Research[edit]

  1. Research is largely discussed in terms of mental illness and obsesity which is somewhat helpful, but does not necessarily help to clearly address the original chapter topic.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. The chapter could benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter has an unnecessarily complicated heading structure - consider simplifying.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. No use of quizzes.
    5. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. Semi-colons are over-used and, in most cases, should be replaced with commas.
    2. Check and correct use of commas.
    3. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Too much visual content is presented too quickly - not enough time to read and listen
  2. Consider including more examples
  3. Conclusion lacks specific, take-home, self-help messages

Communication[edit]

  1. Some font size is too small - split complex slides into separate slides
  2. Audio narration is reasonably good

Production quality[edit]

  1. Basic, but effective use of narrated slides
  2. The video title should be the same as the title and sub-title for the book chapter

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:33, 24 November 2017 (UTC)