Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Risky driving and emotion

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Example news item[edit source]

FYI, in today's news: Police warn against driving while emotional, after mother and daughter killed in car crash. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:03, 10 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for this link will look at it relation to my topicm--U3115339 (discusscontribs) 00:39, 28 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Image Comment[edit source]

Really like the round about picture, excellent display of your topic--Tasha92 (discusscontribs) 02:08, 28 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Tash92, Thank you for this feedback --U3115339 (discusscontribs) 10:33, 3 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I also really like the moving round about in figure 1! I was just thinking about whether indifference would apply as an emotion? This could come into play with the use of phones and similar technology by people while driving. --Liam C (discusscontribs) 12:28, 3 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Liam C Thank you for this and the suggestion about indifference and emotions - will defiantly look into it --U3115339 (discusscontribs) 12:38, 3 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi u3115339! I think the picture of the round-a-bout is very creative. I also like the picture of the car crashing into the pole, you can see how much harm risky driving can cause.--Holly Kingham (discusscontribs) 08:39, 22 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Understanding risky driving[edit source]

Hey there! Just had a quick read through your page and I noticed that you put emphasis on the phrase "safe" when discussing how people can still commit risky behaviours even though they believe themselves to be "safe". It might be a bit out of scope, but I was wondering if you were going to look into whether there is difference in performance between people who believe they are "good" and "safe" drivers compared to people who believe they are regular or "bad" drivers. Also whether age as well as emotion has an effect on the likelihood of risky driving behaviour. Just thought it would be an interesting discussion point as it's something that is often in the media or in general discussions! --U3115299 (discusscontribs) 14:06, 3 September 2017 (UTC) U3115299[reply]

Hey U3115299, Thank you for these suggestions! I will be aiming to talk about different drivers and how they think they are as a driver and if this has an effect on emotions and behaviours that are displayed when driving. With age I plan on discussing this as this is a topic that is discussed alot in the media and there is research that look at the development and how this changes the ability of one to act. An with that i have found a few papers that discuss middle aged people starting to drive risky as well so I believe that will be interesting to address.--U3115339 (discusscontribs) 14:22, 3 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Theories and articles[edit source]

Hey U3115339! Your chapter is shaping up nicely :) As we briefly discussed, it might be good to focus on theories that explain how emotions influence cognition - so you can apply to how they might impact driving behaviour. Research into how emotions impact attention might be particularly relevant - you could contrast negative (narrowing of attention) and positive (broadening of attention) emotions? Check out this article for some background: Pêcher, C., Lemercier, C., & Cellier, J. M. (2009). Emotions drive attention: Effects on driver’s behaviour. Safety Science, 47, 1254-1259. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.ssci.2009.03.011
And this one looks at the impact of anger: Stephens, A. N., Trawley, S. L., Madigan, R., & Groeger, J. A. (2013). Drivers display anger‐congruent attention to potential traffic hazards. Applied Cognitive Psychology, 27, 178-189. https://doi.org/10.1002/acp.2894
Love the quotes from the police - there's the take-home message!
Great topic, look forward to reading more as you go - all the best! --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 04:26, 15 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hey again, a frightening statistic that highlights the importance of your topic - this large naturalistic driving study reported data showing that driving while observably angry, sad, crying, and/or emotionally agitated increases the risk of a crash by 9.8 times compared with model driving. Dingus, T. A., Guo, F., Lee, S., Antin, J. F., Perez, M., Buchanan-King, M., & Hankey, J. (2016). Driver crash risk factors and prevalence evaluation using naturalistic driving data. Proceedings of the National Academy of Sciences, 113, 2636-2641. https://doi.org/10.1073/pnas.1513271113 --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 01:53, 16 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Link[edit source]

Hey! Really interesting topic. Have you thought about including some risky driving laws/penalties from the NSW and ACT road authority websites? May be an interesting addition to you page. Here is a link :) http://www.rms.nsw.gov.au/roads/safety-rules/offences-penalties/index.html Goodluck with your page! --U3117399 (discusscontribs) 02:57, 1 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:43, 15 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Use numbered list
  2. Reasonable descriptions
  3. Indirect links - requires user to do some work to find contributions
  4. The best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Main recommendation - avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
  2. The most important sounding section comes towards the end - How can emotions affect our driving ability? - consider removing much of the basic, descriptive, definition material so that most of the chapter is about what matters most in addressing the topic
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Consider including examples/case studies
  2. See comments about previous section
  3. What are the key theories?
  4. What is the key research evidence?

Image[edit source]

  1. Well used

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA style apply italics, use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html, do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:43, 15 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter that does not adequately provide a summary of the best available theory and research about how emotions affect risk driving.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. In some places, there is some overlap/confusion between describing behaviour and people - e.g., risky driving vs. risky driver - they are related, but there is an important distinction.
  2. There is some overlap/confusion between emotion and mood - e.g., see discussion about this in the textbook and lectures and tutorials.
  3. There is too much general definitional and theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. As a result, the relevant content which addresses the chapter topic doesn't start until half-way, with the section called "How can emotions affect our driving ability?".
  4. Only a relatively small amount of content directly addresses the chapter topic. The chapter then diverts into personality, planned behaviour etc., largely without clearly explaining how this relates to the effect of emotion on risky driving.
  5. In the end, the answer to the question about what emotions contribute to risky driving is not definitely answered.

Research[edit source]

  1. Did you directly consult original editions of early citations such as Cannon (1927)? If not, cite the actual source you consulted.
  2. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses, where available, would be helpful.
  5. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the written expression is quite awkward in many places and unnecessarily wordy (e.g., "Once there is an understanding then the practical understanding..."). The chapter could be rewritten to make it more professional. Use of academic support is reccommended to improve improve the quality of written expression to a professional standard.
    2. Tenses are often mixed within the same sentence. Similar, perspectives after often mixed between first, second, and third person.
    3. The Overview was OK, but could be be rewritten to be more clear and succint.
    4. Instead of using overly long quotes, write about concepts in your own words.
    5. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    6. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
    4. Only use interwiki links on first mention of a key word.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    3. Reasonably good use of images, but none of the images directly, clearly, help to answer the question about which emotions are related to risky driving.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of quizzes.
    6. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. Check and correct overuse of semi-colons
    2. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
    4. Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
    5. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
    6. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions.
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
      2. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
    3. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) for citations involving two or more authors
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply here - basically, too much general material, and insufficient focus on the best available psychological theory and research that directly address the relationship between emotion and risky driving - actual presentation about this only starts half-way through.
  2. Consider using more examples.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Use less text with larger font for more effective visual communication.
  2. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. So ... take-home messages - e.g., which emotions have the biggest impact on risky driving? And what can be done about minimising their imapct?

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality was basic, but sufficient.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:58, 2 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]