Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Risk assessment and emotion

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:48, 17 October 2017 (UTC)

Overlaps in chapters[edit]

Hey there! Interesting chapter. I noticed we have some similar points in our chapters, but mine focuses more on resilience. There is an interesting study called "Risk, resilience, recovery" (you can check out my references), which talks about how when a child is exposed to a risk they develop resilience, and once the risk is removed they no longer need the resilience, and focus on recovery. There is also some info there on risk assessment based on previous exposure. Good luck! Telgey (discusscontribs) 16:46, 20 October 2017, (UTC)


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Standard formatting has now been applied to the title/subtitle
  1. Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  2. Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history

User page[edit]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit]

  1. One (somewhat vaguely) summarised contribution with indirect link to evidence - the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit]

  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure
  2. Avoid providing too much background/generic material (e.g., what is emotion, what is risk assessment etc.). Instead, briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
  3. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  5. It is unclear what major theoretical perspectives will be used

Key points[edit]

  1. At least one basic key points is provided per section - further development is needed
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit]

  1. One image embedded
  2. Use APA style for Figure captions

References[edit]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html, including making the links active hyperlinks
    2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit]

  1. See also
    1. See corrections made to linking style
    2. Include links to other relevant Motivation and Emotion chapters
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. See corrections made to linking style

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:48, 17 October 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a promising, but somewhat theoretically dense/abstract chapter. What are the practical, take-home messages to improve our everyday lives?
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. There is too much general theoretical material about the separate concepts. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., how emotion affects risk assessment). The topic of the chapter isn't directly addresses until approximately half-way through, with the section title "How Emotion can Affect Assessing Risk?".

Research[edit]

  1. Sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter was dense/heavy going - consider providing more examples or case studies or other interactive demonstrations of key concepts.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
    3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Provide internal wiki links to relevant Wikiversity or Wikipedia pages on first mention of key words; but subsequently, do not link those key words.
    3. Embed and add links to See also to other related book chapter in order to integrate this chapter with the broader Motivation and Emotion book project.
    4. Reasonably good use of images.
    5. No use of tables.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. No use of case studies.
  4. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions
    2. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, ...

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Some of the comments about the book chapter also apply here
  2. Examples was helpful - more would be even better
  3. Include citations
  4. Some more specific statements about the effects of specific emotions on risk assessment/decision making would be helpful
  5. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  6. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation is well paced and easy to follow
  2. Visual communication included text and images

Production quality[edit]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality were good, although there is an audio glitch at 0:10 mins.
  3. Image sources acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:02, 2 December 2017 (UTC)