Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Pride

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Article[edit]

Hey, here's an article about pride you might find interesting: Is pride a vice or a virtue - a psychologist explains --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 04:59, 23 September 2017 (UTC)


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Not done - template has now been added

User page[edit]

  1. Not created

Social contribution[edit]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence

Section headings[edit]

  1. Very limited development
  2. Standard sections not included
  3. Body headings not fleshed out

Key points[edit]

  1. No evidence of familiarity with psychological literature on the topic or requirements of the book chapter
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit]

  1. None embedded

References[edit]

  1. Only one reference provided.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit]

  1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:24, 16 October 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very basic chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Basic theory is described. There is not much depth.
  2. The chapter could be improved by providing more examples.

Research[edit]

  1. Basic descriptions of a few relevant research sources are provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  4. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
    2. What are the practical, take-home messages?
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    3. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    4. No use of images.
    5. No use of tables.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
  5. References are not in full APA style e.g.,


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an effective presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content
  2. Pride is clearly conceptualised
  3. Perhaps add more examples
  4. I wasn't so convinced about the content on "how does pride improve our lives" - seems a bit complicated/tangential
  5. Citations?

Communication[edit]

  1. Clearly narrated audio
  2. Slides were text-based, but relatively straightforward to read - some of the more detailed slides probably had too much to comfortably read and listen at the same time
  3. Consider including more images

Production quality[edit]

  1. Basic, but effective production
  2. Font type a bit tricky to read, especially on a small screen/small font size
  3. Video title is very generic: "Pride" which wouldn't be particularly helpful when searching - include the title and subtitle

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:58, 24 November 2017 (UTC)