Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Neurotransmitters and emotion

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I am doing my book chapter on the role of Norepinephrine on emotion and thought your topic was ideal for me to make comments on.

I like the layout of your chapter, how you have started with the neurotransmitters, then the emotions and then combined the 2. I also liked how you have allocated sections to both pharmacological and non-pharmacological treatment. So far I have only included SNRI's (pharmacological treatment) but I will look into other options with Norepinephrine.

I would like to suggest a couple of things:

  1. I found that the Limbic System is the main player when it comes to emotions and neurotransmitters. It may be beneficial for you to look into this if you haven't already.
  2. I also found that norepinephrine and noradrenaline are synonymous so you don't really need seperate sub-headings for these.

All the best for your chapter, I hope my comments have helped.

--CeridwenR (discusscontribs) 12:33, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply


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Just some feed back. Overall your book topic came along really well! The layout of the page was easy to follow, but I would like to put an emphasis on adding plenty of citations as the topic is based on plenty of objective information and theories (mechanisms in the brain etc). Thanks! --Ishiuc (discusscontribs) 14:39, 16 October 2023 (GMT-5)


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Hi! I'm doing my book chapter on the neural correlates of emotional intelligence, and found a few articles that I thought might be of use to you. These were accessed via the UC databases, so you may need to log in first to see them.

I hope you find these of some use. I'd also like to highlight that the structure of your plan seems to be going well and that I'm finding it very easy to follow. All the best! --U3144520 (discusscontribs) 14:48, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:25, 17 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Very good
  2. Layout, capitalisation, wording, and punctuation adjusted to fit with book style and book table of contents.

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Summarise rather than copy and paste contributions
  2. Provide links to direct evidence of the contributions made. The most direct link can be provided by viewing the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings

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  1. Somewhat complex, 3-level structure planned - perhaps consider how this could be simplified to a 2-level structure or to fewer top-level headings.
  2. Avoid providing too much background/generic material (e.g., "Definitions" - a lot of this could be summarised into a table or two, sections on treatment aren't required to adequately address the topic, but some such material could be used as an example). Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points

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  1. Some brief key points provided for some sections, but in general key points are underdeveloped
  2. Include more citations.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
  1. Excellent
  2. Check APA style italication for Figure caption


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  1. Images don't need referencing because clicking on the image provides all the meta-data
  2. No other sources referenced


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  1. See also
    1. None provided
    2. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:25, 17 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback

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  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter that perhaps tries to do much instead of doing a simple job effectively. A single table summarising the relation between neurotransmitters and emotions could help to bring this chapter together and help to provide useful, take-home messages.
  2. This chapter is well over the maximum word count, therefore material from the "Anxiety" heading onwards is ignored for marking purposes. Abbreviate general background material which is not directly addressing the targeted topic of the chapter.
  3. For some additional feedback, see these copyedits.
  1. Theories were well described and explained, but there needed to be discipline and selectivity about what to present.
  1. Good coverage of research; the key area for improvement is to provide high-level summary of key findings.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression is reasonably good, with some areas for improvement (e.g., see my copyedits).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter was well structured, but perhaps overly detailed.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.

would make the text more interactive.

    1. Images and quizzes are well used.
  1. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. Some spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
  2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
    1. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


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  1. Overall, this is basic, but effective presentation.
  1. Comments about the chapter content also apply to the presentation - basically, it would be ideal to have some more practical information about which neurotransmitters are most strongly related to which emotions. Recognising the complexity is important, but so is offering some basic understanding in the form of practical, take-home messages and examples.
  2. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little
  3. Ownership apostrophe needed for Tompkins'
  1. Well paced audio
  2. Clear visuals
  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the video name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Mute music during presentation to allow viewer to concentrate on the narration and slides
  3. Clearly recorded audio
  4. Clear, simple, well prepared visuals

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:03, 27 November 2017 (UTC)Reply