Hi Mental toughness is a great topic! I'm not sure if you have seen the documentary "Into the Void"? Its about 2 guys who are climbing a mountain in Peru in the 80's and things don't quite go as planned! I found it was an incredible display of Mental Toughness. Thought you might be able to use it for your book chapter. --U3135539 (discuss • contribs) 04:28, 1 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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There seems to be a mis-match between the proposed content (mental toughness in sport) and the topic listed in the book's table of contents (mental toughness). Sport can be used an example of mental toughness in action, but it should not be the main focus of the chapter.
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Semi-developed 2-level structure is proposed - would benefit from further development
Avoid too much basic info about definitions; consider broadening this section to explain how MT is similar to and/or differs from related concepts such as resilience, hardiness, grit etc.
Remember the marking criteria emphasises theory, research, and bringing the topic to life through interactivity, such as examples, links, images, quizzes etc.
Personality may be relevant but it may not be central - the whole point of MT is to understand how it can be developed rather than suggesting that some people are inherently more MT because of their personality traits, so be careful with this section - is personality theory the best theory about MT? More relevant could be explaining the connection between MT and emotion/emotion theory e.g., emotional stability, emotion knowledge, emotional coping etc.
Key points are developed for each section - could be more strongly based on relevant citations to help ensure that the key marking criteria are being addressed
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
Wiki style references - either use this style (following what is used for featured articles on Wikipedia) or APA style (which is most other M&E book chapters are using).
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Overall, this is an underdeveloped chapter which provides an insufficient description of what is known about MT from peer-reviewed psychological theory and research.
How is mental toughness similar to, and different from, related constructs such as resilience, hardiness, grit etc.?
Some odd claims are made (e.g., "Sport is no longer run and organised by community clubs."). Greater clarity and precision is needed to better convey intended meaning.
In general, avoid starting sentences with an author name, unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, what is of far more interest to the reader, is the content/key point, with the citation included in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
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Overall, this presentations consists of approximately half a dozen downloadable, text-based powerpoint slides. This does not satisfy the basic criteria for an online multimedia presentation.
Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
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Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and for the title of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Provide a clickable link to the book chapter.
Explain what MT and why it matters, and how it is similar to/different from related constructs.
What is the key theory/theories?
Consider using larger font to make the text easier to read.
Why focus on optimism and coping - this isn't directly part of the topic (i.e., isn't part of the title and subtitle)?
The presentation seems to conflate MT with coping?
Is Grant Hackett a good example of MT? (Seems like his case demonstrates a lack of MT?)
