Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Mental toughness

Discussion

Hey! I found a link to a YouTube video that might help you with deciding on some key points for your book chapter. You might even be able to use it as inspiration for your audio-visual section. Here is the link! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LCPgvTRftZg --U3117399 (discuss • contribs) 05:52, 21 August 2017 (UTC)

Hi Mental toughness is a great topic! I'm not sure if you have seen the documentary "Into the Void"? Its about 2 guys who are climbing a mountain in Peru in the 80's and things don't quite go as planned! I found it was an incredible display of Mental Toughness. Thought you might be able to use it for your book chapter. --U3135539 (discuss • contribs) 04:28, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Hey, here's an article you might like: "Why adventure fuels mental toughness" --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 02:01, 24 September 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:46, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC OK, but sub-title doesn't match the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history There seems to be a mis-match between the proposed content (mental toughness in sport) and the topic listed in the book's table of contents (mental toughness). Sport can be used an example of mental toughness in action, but it should not be the main focus of the chapter. User page Created Social contribution One minimalistic contribution Summarise rather than pasting the contribution Ideally, provide links to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines. Section headings See earlier comment about heading casing Semi-developed 2-level structure is proposed - would benefit from further development Avoid too much basic info about definitions; consider broadening this section to explain how MT is similar to and/or differs from related concepts such as resilience, hardiness, grit etc. Remember the marking criteria emphasises theory, research, and bringing the topic to life through interactivity, such as examples, links, images, quizzes etc. Personality may be relevant but it may not be central - the whole point of MT is to understand how it can be developed rather than suggesting that some people are inherently more MT because of their personality traits, so be careful with this section - is personality theory the best theory about MT? More relevant could be explaining the connection between MT and emotion/emotion theory e.g., emotional stability, emotion knowledge, emotional coping etc. Key points Key points are developed for each section - could be more strongly based on relevant citations to help ensure that the key marking criteria are being addressed Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image One image provided Consider increasing image size from default Consider enhancing figure captions to help explain how the image helps to illustrate key points being made in the text References Wiki style references - either use this style (following what is used for featured articles on Wikipedia) or APA style (which is most other M&E book chapters are using). Resources Rename the links Include more details in brackets are the link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:56, 17 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an underdeveloped chapter which provides an insufficient description of what is known about MT from peer-reviewed psychological theory and research. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory The theoretical conceptualisation of mental toughness presented in this chapter is fairly lightweight - e.g., consider incorporating resources such as http://researchdirect.westernsydney.edu.au/islandora/object/uws:7274 How is mental toughness similar to, and different from, related constructs such as resilience, hardiness, grit etc.? Some odd claims are made (e.g., "Sport is no longer run and organised by community clubs."). Greater clarity and precision is needed to better convey intended meaning. Research Many statements are unreferenced - see the tags Basic coverage of definitional research is provided, but little research about the determinants and effects of MT is provided. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression In general, avoid starting sentences with an author name, unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, what is of far more interest to the reader, is the content/key point, with the citation included in brackets at the end of the sentence. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Minimal use of images. No use of tables. No use of quizzes. Little use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct capitalisation. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations Citations should not include author initials. References are not in APA style

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this presentations consists of approximately half a dozen downloadable, text-based powerpoint slides. This does not satisfy the basic criteria for an online multimedia presentation. Structure and content Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply. Add an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication Consider increasing font size to make slides easier to read. Add audio narration. Consider including examples. Consider including images. Consider including research. Consider including practical, take-home messages. Production quality Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Copyright license not indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:34, 5 December 2017 (UTC)

Feedback about the Multimedia resubmission

1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and for the title of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
2. Provide a clickable link to the book chapter.
3. Explain what MT and why it matters, and how it is similar to/different from related constructs.
4. What is the key theory/theories?
5. Consider using larger font to make the text easier to read.
6. Why focus on optimism and coping - this isn't directly part of the topic (i.e., isn't part of the title and subtitle)?
7. The presentation seems to conflate MT with coping?
8. Is Grant Hackett a good example of MT? (Seems like his case demonstrates a lack of MT?)
9. What are the practical, take-home messages?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:03, 13 December 2017 (UTC)