Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Meaning and happiness

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Hi I'm doing my book chapter on Parental Pressureand how if affects kids happiness. Whilst I was researching I came across this reference and thought you might be able to use this link to a lit review of happiness by Ryan and Deci Good luck with the book chapter! --U3135539 (discusscontribs) 05:14, 1 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm doing a chapter on Awe and well-being - I've included a link to your chapter because experiencing awe may be one way to facilitate a sense of meaning in life. Perhaps link back to mine too if you like? Was just reading this article for my chapter and thought it might be useful for you - it proposes a model that breaks meaning into three aspects - coherence, purpose, and significance. Could be good to explore each aspect separately in your chapter - as they each have a slightly different relationship with happiness.
Martela, F., & Steger, M. F. (2016). The three meanings of meaning in life: Distinguishing coherence, purpose, and significance. The Journal of Positive Psychology, 11, 531-545. doi:10.1080/17439760.2015.1137623
There's also some really cool research about how self-transcendence helps meaning-making that you might be able to use - check out this review for more info " --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 22:18, 15 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Title formatting has been adjusted (minor)

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. One summarised with links, but link can be improved - the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare selected revisions, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Reasonably well developed 2-level heading structure, however the first couple of sections after the Overview can be briefly summarises with internal wiki links to more info, allowing this chapter to focus in a more dedicated fashion on the relationship between the concepts. This is one of the more common, major bits of feedback - i.e., avoid providing too much background/generic material so that the chapter focusses most of the content (theory, research, and examples) on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
  2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Having said this, the sub-title includes the question, what is meaning, so this does need to be considered. The most important part, however, is "how does meaning relate to happiness?". To help answer the latter question, consider the types of happiness, , and which types may be most influenced by meaning and why. Also consider how happiness can be enhanced by enhancing meaning.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Some general key points are provided for some sections, but the key points are underdeveloped overall.
  2. Frankl's logotherapy is important.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. One image embedded
  2. Consider increasing image size from default
  3. Consider enhancing figure captions to help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Use bullet points
  2. Include more information about the destination in brackets after the link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:16, 16 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an impressive chapter in that it provides very good coverage of relevant theory and research relating separately to happiness and meaning, and about their relationship, with a well-integrated case study.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories were well described and explained with examples.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well cited.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding more interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. Basic use of tables.
    4. No use of quizzes.
    5. Very good use is made of an integrated case study.
  4. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation twisted the focus of the chapter from what is the relationship between M and H, to what are the differences between a M and H life.
  2. The presentation conveys the key points from the chapter, but could be more effective by being more selective and presenting less content, with more elaboration e.g., examples.
  3. Presentation consisted of text and narrated audio.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio narration is too fast - be more selective and slow down or a more effective presentation.
  2. Text-based slides contained good information, but there was too much text with too much fast audio to really take in effectively as a viewer over the the 3 minutes.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Basic, but effective production.
  2. There was some visual lag between slides.
  3. Audio recording quality was clear.
  4. Meta-data - video title should match the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:53, 24 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]