Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/James-Lange theory of emotion

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Comments[edit]

Hi there! You have made such a great start on your book chapter! Don't forget to APA reference the image you have used of the cyclist being swooped by the magpie, .i.e. Figure 1. Additionally, change the current 'Figure 1' to 'Figure 2'. Well done and good luck! --u3066780 (discusscontribs) 2:10, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

Hey there, looks like it's all coming along great, though I'd suggest maybe putting in a case study, just to show off some examples of the emotions in your chapter. James has a link to how to do the coding for seperate boxes. Hope this helps :) RainbowUnicorn97 (discusscontribs) 11.07pm, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:42, 16 October 2017 (UTC)


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Title/sub-title should be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit]

  1. One contribution summarised with indirect link to evidence - the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit]

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure (e.g., for the critiques/alternative theories section).
  2. The sections are relevant and seem to flow logically.
  3. Consider integrating theory, research, and examples, rather than having a separate section for research.

Key points[edit]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit]

  1. Images are well used, but use APA style for captions - Figure 1 etc.
  2. Also consider increasing the size of images which are difficult to read.

References[edit]

  1. Good.
  2. Did you consult James (1892)? If not, a secondary citation may be more appropriate. If yes, was it the original edition? (unlikely). Or online - if so, retrieved from where?
  3. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:42, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:09, 21 November 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter which would be sufficient if the quality of written expression and citation were improved to a professional standard.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. The Overview could be improved by providing an example. It could also be helpful to establish some focus questions.
  2. A good understanding of the key theories is evident.
  3. Some examples are provided.

Research[edit]

  1. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  2. There is some repetition of reporting about studies e.g., Levenson and facial expressions.
  3. Basic but sufficient coverage of research about the JL theory is provided.
  4. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  5. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  6. Useful recommendations for future research.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression is problematic.
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Good use of quizzes.
    5. Good use of case studies.
  3. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
    3. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
  4. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    3. Check and correct APA style for direct quotes of 40 or greater words
    4. Use APA style for Figure captions
    5. Citations
      1. Use APA style for formatting of citations.
      2. Did you consult the original 19th century citations - very unlikely. Learn to how to cite these texts. These citations should be to James (1892/year of publication consulted) and James (1899/year of publication consulted) not William (1892) etc.
    6. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. Also provide author second initials where available
      4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, wow, this is a fantastic video that explains the theory in an easy to understand, interesting, engaging manner!

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Very well selected content - the key points are selected and illustrated.

Communication[edit]

  1. Audio is excellent - well scripted and paced.
  2. Video/visuals are fantastic - really well organised, edited, etc.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Fantastic Smiley.svg
  2. Add a title slide at the beginning
  3. Use the chapter title and sub-title for the youtube video title

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:22, 26 November 2017 (UTC)