Hi user MMMRH9416! I'm interested in keeping up with your page! sounds like a very interesting topic. I did a quick search of the good lives model and found an article that might be useful to start you off! Ward, T., Mann, R. E., & Gannon, T. A. (2007). The good lives model of offender rehabilitation: Clinical implications. Aggression and Violent Behavior, 12(1), 87-107. doi:10.1016/j.avb.2006.03.004. Hope this helps! --U3133258 (discuss • contribs) 12:04, 3 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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2-level heading structure is usually about right - sufficiently detailed without being overly complex - e.g., perhaps consider simplifying the current 3-level structure down to 2 levels
Section on past problems and other background info is probably not needed - can be incorporated into other sections (this appears to have been subsequently removed)
Something like a basic 4 section main body structure could be around background to the model (i.e., the problem), the model (particularly theoretical basis), applications of the model, and research about the pros and cons of the model, with sub-sections for longer sections
Consider incorporating case study/ies earlier on to help provide practical examples to engage the reader
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Limited development of key points at time of topic development submission
Need to demonstrably connect the GLM with motivation and motivation theory, particularly in the Overview and Conclusion, as well as emphasise the take-home messages in relation to motivation to fit with the book theme
Some paragraphs are overly long - consider expressing one main idea in three to five sentences per paragraph
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter. The main area for improvement is to reduce it down to below the maximum word count.
The title casing and sub-title text were adjusted to match the book table of contents.
The chapter was more than 1000 words over the word count, therefore for marking purposes content from half-way through Phase 5 onwards was ignored. One way to reduce the word count would be remove or summarise content that does not directly address the topic (the chapter sub-title). In addition, see these copyedits for further suggested edits to help reduce the word count.
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Abbreviate/summarise the preliminary theoretical material to allow greater focus on the GLM, examples, research, and applying the GLM to everyday life.
Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
Autoplay didn't auto-advance the slides.
Add link to book chapter in the description of the presentation.
