Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Exercise and negative emotions

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Exercise can be incorporated into everyday life by just minor changes. For example walking to the nearby shops instead of driving there, taking the stairs instead of the lift, minor stretching, walking for a few minutes during the break or just having a stroll around your garden in the evening. Wishmi 3/09/17

Feedback[edit source]

Hi Morgan, great page thus far, I can see you have considered a breadth of research and theory and you have broken up your chapter into subsections really well. I have a few tips relative to subjects you can employ in your chapter:

  1. Maybe under cognitive effects you could consider cognitive dissonance theory?
  2. For a more comprehensive review you could examine different types of physical exercise e.g. strength and aerobic exercise
  3. Maybe you could address the intensity and duration variables of exercise and if they have a significant impact in mediating negative emotions
  4. One area of exercise which has received exponential growth is the use of biofeedback tools like fitbits, maybe this could be incorporated into the section of what techniques individuals can use? I also noticed that James has suggested to incorporate a case study, maybe you can use this topic to develop one?

Hope these points can help in your chapter! Good Luck --U3144362 (discusscontribs) 08:51, 18 October 2017 (UTC)u3144362 7:50PM

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Consider using headings

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. One summarised contribution - quality of summary can be improved (didn't make sense to me)
  2. Link to evidence can be improve - suggest using non-mobile link and note that the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Use question marks for headings
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with some relevant citations.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent

References[edit source]

  1. Very good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Make doi links active hyperlinks
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Put these external links into a separate external links section
    2. Include links to other relevant book chapters and relevant Wikipedia articles
  2. External links
    1. Links to external websites/resources

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:12, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter feedback[edit source]

Hi I saw your moodle post looking for some feedback. This looks like a really interesting topic and you have set it out well. As our pages are intended for a non psych audience and how they can use this stuff in real life I would imagine there would be a lot of interest in benefits of exercise versus SSRI's for people who are not keen on medication. I found the part you are up to a bit tricky in that I wasnt really sure where to start! If it was me I would begin with the definitions (make sure you keep it fairly brief and link to other pages). The first bit is the toughest to begin then it gets easier. I tried to imagine I was writing it for an actual person who was interested in my topic. It helped me tell the story. Good luck! let me know if you want me to look again before its due. --U3135539 (discusscontribs) 10:47, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback[edit source]

Hi Morgan,

I can see that your chapter is coming together very well. Your chapter is interesting and I can see that you are referencing a lot of good sources. The plans you have added in from 4.0 to 4.4 are comprehensive to answering your topic question. I think you are headed in the right direction, everything you have so far is also very well written and easy to follow.

Kind regards --EmmaCane28 (discusscontribs) 07:59, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi There. You're topic looks like its coming along well! The only thing I would suggest is the use of a few more images. Perhaps in the "What are negative emotions?" section. I think this will really help people engage with the topic. I also noticed you haven't linked any previous book chapter to your "see also" section. I went ahead and had a search for some chapters you might find useful. I suggest having a look at

  • Exercise and mood (Book chapter 2014)
  • Exercise motivations (book chapter 2014)
  • Exercise motivation and personality (Book chapter 2016)

Hope this helps! --U3133258 (discusscontribs) 07:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Adding shorter sub-headings maybe[edit source]


I read through your chapter and it looks really good. Everything is well researched as well. I would just recommend adding shorter subtitles or headings and then providing a small overview and then branching that into the bigger headings in your chapter. It just makes the layout and the table of contents look more neat and tidy. I was going to direct edit for you but wasn't sure if this was something you'd want to do?

I hope this helps! All the best

Quick Suggestions[edit source]

Hi Morgan! I was just reading through your chapter and WOW! You have really out-done yourself when it comes to information and analysis! Very very informative :) I would only make a few suggestions regarding the overall look of your chapter and it usability. The integration of some images would really improve and break up your chapter (I always go straight for the pictures when I am doing any readings haha!) and also some case studies! Your chapter is so specific in the topic that you have chosen so some mock up case studies would really help with overall understanding and again, it would break up the chapter visually.

Hope this helps :) Psychostudent

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter.
  2. The chapter is over the maximum word count - reduce the general material e.g., about negative emotion (link to other relevant material) and concentrate on addressing the focus of the chapter.
  3. The chapter could be improved by providing a more substantial Conclusion, with practical, take-home messages.
  4. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The relationship between type of exercise and negative emotion should be more explained and clarified.
  2. Perhaps also consider green exercise.
  3. Theoretical mechanisms were reasonably covered, but the emphasis was more on research findings. Ideally, bring together the theoretical elements of exercise that appear to be causal in alleviating negative emotion.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research studies are described.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Research findings should usually be described in the past tense.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians only make up 0.33% of the world human population.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Good use of section-located quiz questions.
    2. Interwiki links are well used.
    3. Reasonably good use of images.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. Avoid overuse of semi-colons where colons should be used.
    2. Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. Check and correct APA style for citations (e.g,. use of commas)
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct italicisation
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an engaging, well organised, interesting presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. Consider providing an Overview slide - what will be covered in this presentation?
  3. Perhaps more could be covered about the theory - i.e., how can/does exercise help to reduce negative emotions - and which negative emotions can it have the greatest impact on?
  4. Perhaps more could be covered about the research - e.g. what size of effect might be expected from 30 minutes of moderate aerobic exercise.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Well narrated - not too fast or two slow.
  2. Video animation is excellent - works well.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation is under the maximum time limit.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the video name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:53, 27 November 2017 (UTC)